The Good Old Days - Journal

EYES - 

The round-of-life scene,
Hope of hereafter,
An aspect between

Movement hinders sight      and more
A sandy beach
Spread at the shore

Glaze      crust    an itchy lid
Harsh chemicals
A thousand things hid

But now I lay me down,
Bright years in favor,
Beloved benevolent of the town

Lids drop comfortably,
A flesh-fast wall
See this dusty saffron galaxy -

All speculation, mind,
Based on ancient sacred text,
On human eyes, script of the time –

This mellow – now beige – array
Of swirling, tiny specks sifted,
Some far brightness on display

Beyond could be angels awing
So white, inner eye barely detects
But soul might hear them sing

More glorious than Cologne,
Alpine, or billowing clouds,
Their sweet voices whisper, moan

Forgot the body prime -
That ultimately false prison -
In this thoughtless region sublime

Dave Austin

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 9/14/2014 4:24:00 PM
Our eyes hold and know the soul's innermost secrets, and yet there are so many hidden things on the outside that our eyes just can't see.... I love the depth and expression in this beautiful write. An amazing poem, Daver!
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Date: 9/11/2014 9:24:00 AM
Sounds like an out of body experience to me my friend. What a wonderful place to be. bfn Lainie
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Date: 9/11/2014 7:41:00 AM
I agree with Phyllis, it is a wonderful poem. When I read free verse written this well I have newfound and far deeper respect for it! For this is indeed a fine write!
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Date: 9/9/2014 6:42:00 AM
Fantastic! "An aspect between" very profound line.
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Daver Austin
Date: 9/9/2014 8:01:00 AM
Somethings screwed up, took out The Good Old Days and put in my latest death poem. No big deal. No one is reading my stuff but you anywho. But thanks a million for reading my stuff. Love, daver
Date: 9/8/2014 2:29:00 PM
Simply great, Daver mate.' I shan't try to add That would be futile, A type of fad.?? Anyhow holding, thought enfolding, damn..' I was doing it.' but the thing is I sent you 'runny mail, however now I shall soup off, as all the running stuff has been used up keep well Joe..'
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Date: 9/8/2014 11:45:00 AM
A wonderful poem and i like the use of the rhyme here. love phyl
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