The Glass Eye

The Glass Eye

My window is an eye on the morning stretch. 
Raspy green grasses tangle up in the vetch.
A mama quail runs down the soft red clay path.
Her fat round babies edged to the drain for a bath. 

I see the hill slope up in poppy and craggy oak.
One lone gray cloud trails on cobalt blue, like smoke.
The sounds of a barn owl are near but it hides,
And only my window can find where it resides.

Then finally, the children dance by on to school.
The window knows innocence here in the rural.  
A giggle, a shout, dropping books as they race,
The bus winks lights, on the knoll, in its place. 

My window blinks back with it's stare of the hill;
Its shimmer reflects our morning time drill.
The eyelash curtains brush back with the breeze,
I turn to my paper, and coffee, and do as I please.

By Edlynn Nau
©  April 20, 2016
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Marcum Wong Avatar
June 26, 2019 at 3:57 PM
Your window seen through a poet's eyes...so enchanting Edlynn! Beautiful imagery and metaphors! : ) xxoo
Nau Avatar
June 27, 2019 at 12:48 PM
Got it! Resides and not Presides and why didn’t I see that before? Had you not have read it, I would not have caught it. Huh! Editing our own stuff is difficult at best!
Nau Avatar
June 27, 2019 at 12:43 PM
Thanks! Glad you reviewed this poem from 2016. It allowed me to see a mistake. Will fix.
Salehi Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 12:16 PM
Very impressive, only in 10 minutes!!!! What will happen if you spend 11 minutes?? WoW.
Salehi Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 2:13 AM
You're great.... love to hear 11 minute poems of yours.
Nau Avatar
June 2, 2016 at 12:31 PM
Ha ha ha! I suspect 11 minutes would have given me an entire minute to tweak it! Thank you for stopping in to have a read and for your review. Just when you think no one will comment on a poem under three days old! Nice surprise!
Makama Avatar
May 5, 2016 at 1:21 PM
This is is fine piece with soul-reaching quality. I love this so much
Nau Avatar
May 5, 2016 at 2:47 PM
Thank you so much! I felt this was rather a lame piece b/c it's just stream of consciousness in such a short time and write. Rhyming is easy for me and I was reticent to even post this. You have all made me feel a bit better. I think it could use some tweaking. It's lovely when you say that you love this! Hmmm. Maybe I'll take that second look.
Grahamburglar Avatar
May 4, 2016 at 10:50 PM
You wrote this in under 10 minutes? Impressive. I fancy my self a writer...but I'm not much of a rhymer unless I REALLY slow it down. Great work, and beautiful, vivid imagery here. -G
Nau Avatar
May 5, 2016 at 4:43 AM
I found when I taught 5th graders to write poetry that they would tap their pencils for a half an hour and write nothing. So I started FIVE MINUTE POETRY. I'd set a timer and they had to just start writing. I'd give the topic. Now they could rhyme or not (doesn't matter). Then I said, when the bell chimes they can STOP and just tap again. What happens. They DO NOT STOP. It's fun! Try it! Write in 5 and EDIT as long as it takes. This exercise was to do both in 10! YIKES! Thanks for give it a read and stopping by.
Lindley Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 6:02 PM
FAV'ING THIS ONE TOO. EXCELLENT RHYME, FLOW AND IMAGERY. IF TWO VERSES LESS IT WOULD HAVE BEEN A TOP SHELF SONNET METHINKS.A7
Nau Avatar
May 5, 2016 at 4:37 AM
Ah ha! Even if I left off two lines to make 14 then there would still be the problem of those 10 silly syllables and the stress counts. Nope, I'm guessing this will boil down to a basic rhyme. Thank you Robert for you visits, reads, and encouraging words and thoughts. I hope to visit all of you here by Monday!
Callus Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 10:41 AM
I enjoyed looking out of your window, Edlynn:) Mama and baby quails make a cute picture...and so is the last line. ~ An interesting exercise; a good idea for a contest. ~ Regards // paul
Nau Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 12:34 PM
Thanks Paul! It was an interesting experiment! It only works if people don't cheat. It was obvious who wrote in 10 min or under and who took a day and produced a masterpiece (the problem if it were a contest). OHHH you can tell! Ha ha! €;-D
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