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The Girl Who Ate the National Park

Today I present an old poem, written at least a decade before "Doubts". What this poem lacks in poetic format, and style, it reaps in sentiment.
Enjoy:

the Girl Who Ate the National Park

I was picking apples, from polystyrene
boxes, when she held aloft a spiky
green football and her excited voice
asked, “What do you call this?”
She named it durian. I didn’t know,
and pulled a lettuce from its packing.
Harvested multigrain rolls
from bakery bins, and hunted
sandwich ham from fridges.

I laid our picnic mat down
amongst market gardens, and planted myself
to grow in her company. Uncorked
a shiraz in a vineyard, and savoured
her smile. Pulled an apricot from the cooler,
in an orchard, and hungrily
consumed her words.

She took to the park's paths
like shopping aisles. Selecting ingredients
for a salad from green foliage shelves.
She chose a duck dish
as it flew above us, and decided on a fish,
as we watched it swim
beneath the waterfall.
Then as we left, she created a desert
from the trees.

Her touch stopped me. Rooted
me to the spot, where we ravenously
embraced. Our feelings blossoming
around us. Forming a canopy
which we took shelter under,
and bore fruit, that we ate together.
Our appetites sated.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 11/21/2015 12:27:00 AM
Hi Scott:) Congratulations on your placement. ThanXs for supporting my contest. <3 Love SKAT
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Date: 4/15/2015 9:28:00 AM
Hello my dear friend, scott. This is a brilliant write! Old or new it doesn't matter. I didn't only enjoy the first part but the whole poem. A very sweet and touching one. You've mentioned here the foods which satiate me here:)). I'm so honored and grateful that you invited me to read this precious gem. Thank you so much. Once again, Happy Songkran Day to you and your wife. love lots and biggest hug, Leonora
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Date: 2/26/2015 3:02:00 AM
Who said you need you poetic form? Sometimes the most poignant thoughts aren't contained in haiku and sonnets. I think most of us agree that these are very poignant and beautiful.
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Date: 12/1/2014 9:59:00 PM
Well you really did catch my attention with that title - intriguing titles are key. Sometimes sentiment can be a style of it's own, and it for sure isn't lacking here. "Pulled an apricot from the cooler, in an orchard, and hungrily consumed her words." This is a great use of expression, here! You already have that image of eating - and it shows you care about her thoughts and opinions, instead of just staring at her - her words must have real substance.
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Date: 6/20/2014 2:08:00 AM
7rate
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Date: 6/20/2014 2:07:00 AM
I found this unique and good. Now I gotta read of the Places you've PEED! 7up
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Date: 5/11/2014 6:06:00 PM
very clever write here, my friend
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Date: 5/6/2014 9:15:00 PM
Scott What a great poem full of feeling and emotion. The imagery and description makes me feel I am on this journey with you. Thank you for the nice comment on my Ran My Heart Over poem.
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Date: 5/6/2014 3:26:00 PM
Wow Scott so good, it felt almost Yellow Submarinie? I really liked it! Light & Love
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Date: 4/30/2014 9:45:00 AM
So glad you shared this wondorous masterpiece. Bravo my friend!
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Date: 4/20/2014 4:51:00 PM
Oh, this is so delicious with all its competent allusions. Really quite admirable and delightfully crafted. Absolutely no need to apologize.
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Date: 4/12/2014 8:32:00 PM
gosh, Scott. this is amazing. Really good poetry. you say it's from long ago? it's one of your best!!
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Date: 4/12/2014 8:32:00 PM
i'm gonna fave it. Best one I might have read tonight.
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Date: 4/9/2014 5:19:00 PM
WOW, Scott, beauty is in the eye of the hunger mind. A lovely ending, I imagine a lovely picnic taking place, gazing into the path of a beautiful start. Beautiful and captivating, my friend. XOX~ Linda
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Date: 4/7/2014 12:00:00 AM
Enjoyed the day in National Park with this poem. Thanks for sharing.
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