The Forest of Toil

Her hair black as the hills of oil,
and thick as the forest of toil.
Adonis, with large palms, works hard,
to win her heart, under armed guard.
Her father keeps her chaste; in stow.

Charms’ locks, curly and blonde as sun.
He’s blinding; she thinks he’s the one.
Slips through the gate; she scans the skies.
She seeks the truth; love is all lies.
Her father knew; wisdom comes slow.

She is fated to always run.
(Too late…her father was the sun.
He kept her safe; wanted the best.)
Escape from hell, youth’s put to rest,
White teardrop gown, six feet below.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Hind Avatar
May 5, 2025 at 11:35 AM
Deep, with finality- love seen first as false and the end begun
Rodrigues Avatar
May 5, 2025 at 4:47 PM
The dominoes tumbled!
Dietrich Avatar
May 4, 2025 at 1:43 PM
I really like this,Kim. It feels like it is based on mythology.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 5, 2025 at 4:47 PM
Thank you so much! It was fun to try a “lay” poem!
Empress Avatar
May 4, 2025 at 10:50 AM
What a deep and intriguing poem that somehow resonates and emanates so many emotions dear Kim, i especially felt “ Slips through the gate; she scans the skies. She seeks the truth; love is all lies. Her father knew; wisdom comes slow” true with time , wisdom and truth will prevail. Pleasure reading you today! Sending you light always
Rodrigues Avatar
May 5, 2025 at 4:48 PM
Thank you so much, Ink!
DiMino Avatar
May 4, 2025 at 8:16 AM
Yep, father knows best. But mother rules heartfelt over father's stern mess. Thank God.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 5, 2025 at 4:46 PM
Could be or maybe the father knew what trouble lurked outside the forest.
Brul Avatar
May 3, 2025 at 9:12 PM
Such a lovely thought provoking poem. I am new to this form. Keep coming my dear Kim. Stay creative!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 4, 2025 at 5:27 AM
I thought I’d give this form a try!
Winter Avatar
May 3, 2025 at 8:11 PM
Dear Kim, this poem is hauntingly beautiful and the writing is so beautifully emotional and captivating. Best, Anne
Rodrigues Avatar
May 4, 2025 at 5:26 AM
Thank you, Anne!
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