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The Descent

Drowsy vertigo thoughts losing their substance in the spirals of deafening maelstrom black waters, my letters—my ruins—my Sodom becoming the cries that never reach bottom— —never reach bottom— never reach bottom— now becoming both absence and presence, lurking among their ashen, disintegrating essence. The stubborn nails doomed in this sinking box restoring their vileness, those rotten thoughts somehow find themselves looking up— looking up— looking up— dizzily, dismally, dishearten by the luminance never again to be reached— absence and presence and eminence engulfed. In time, Mnemosyne alone witnesses the damned parts of me die.

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Date: 2/17/2025 6:56:00 AM
Laura, this poem has a strong and difficult-to-process feeling. Who really wants to be in this position? I can relate to these feelings in terms of relationships soured and career work lost. However, I feel as though no matter how low I am pushed, I can fly and gain altitude. I don't think I can ever be suppressed by anyone or anything because I've spent enough time figuring out how to heal from what went wrong before. This allows for forgiveness which goes a long way. Hard to reckon. Even with all that said, it is a pleasure to read this and take that journey down with you. It's a wonderful thing to experience what it feels like they way you put it together with such brilliance. Smiles, of course!!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/24/2025 6:51:00 PM
I love your spirit - flying above it all. I can imagine you in the sky, above the sourness and above all that's been lost. Thanks for taking the journey with me, pilot Duke ;) <3 Laura
Date: 2/7/2025 6:35:00 PM
a beauty this one, the flow, the phrasings - glad i came across this
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/11/2025 11:30:00 AM
Thank you Mat — I really appreciate you taking the time to read!
Date: 2/5/2025 9:31:00 AM
This is amazingly put together, so much to learn from this , given to us in such a elegant way
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/5/2025 11:28:00 AM
Thank you Stephan - your words mean a lot to me..

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