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The Day After Christmas Premiere Contest Winner

On the day after Christmas, they started appearing, cast out of houses, stripped of their finery, lying crooked in the gutter, garbage bags flanking. My brothers and I walked to school and halfway there, three blocks away, was a steep ravine called The Hollow. A place of some dark mystery in summer, one hundred feet deep and forbidden land according to most parents, The Hollow sang its song to all neighborhood kids. Returning to school after Christmas, my brothers and I would drag the discarded Christmas trees along the sidewalk and onto the bridge that spanned The Hollow, then heave them over the railing, watching their graceful tumble earthward, their air brushing final fall. "Hey, I used to do that too!" Donnie was a lot older, almost done with high school, and his walk took him right by our elementary school - he laughed to see us hauling the trees to that concluding bridge. He grabbed a large one, bigger than any of us could handle, and upon the bridge had us help him hold it upright on the railing, as it stood in life, as it looked down upon Christmas gifts; we watched it slowly lean into Gravity, watched the balletic descent into silence. Donnie kept with us that first month into the new year, the pile of trees growing in the bottom of The Hollow. He told us things, we told him things, we asked him things and he told us more. My brothers and I still talk about that big tree on the railing of the bridge over The Hollow. It hit right on top of the pile of other trees and bounced off to the side, its own special place. As January wore on, we didn't find as many trees, and ultimately it was all done. Eventually the school year too was done, and then more years, and school itself was done. The trees at the bottom of The Hollow rotted away to nothing. Somewhere in there my mom told me that Donnie had been shipped off to war, killed within a few weeks. We had that one magic month. December 25, 2016 For Anthony Slausen's contest - 'The Day After Christmas'

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Date: 4/21/2017 5:31:00 PM
Doug, I did read this before now ... but let me offer my belated SEVEN. I was expecting some accident in the middle of the poem, but the surprise ending is tragic, even for patriotic service being the loss of this older Friend. U may have immortalized him, PTL. shalom
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Doug Vinson
Date: 4/22/2017 8:21:00 AM
Thank you, Anil.
Date: 4/7/2017 9:03:00 PM
this is quite amazing, Doug. What a twist at the end. Sorry I had to get up from my computer for a bit and now I'm back and am finished for the night!! SEVEN on this gem
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Doug Vinson
Date: 4/8/2017 9:54:00 AM
:: laughing... :: Oh, Andrea. : ) No need to apologize. I'm glad you like it.
Date: 4/7/2017 8:51:00 PM
another one on your best poems list. and a trophy winner no less!! Let me read this.
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Date: 3/16/2017 4:23:00 AM
Excellent. Very vivid :)
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Doug Vinson
Date: 3/16/2017 12:58:00 PM
Thanks for reading and for the nice comment, Rebecca. Hope things are going well over your way. : )
Date: 3/9/2017 4:58:00 AM
Hello Doug. Congratulations on your winning entry. You wrote with vividness. We were there along with the characters looking on. Also your ending made us stop and pause for it was very expressive with thought and emotion. Well done throughout.
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Doug Vinson
Date: 3/9/2017 9:00:00 AM
Hey Lisa. : ) Thank you.
Date: 2/24/2017 7:18:00 PM
Congratulations Doug
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Doug Vinson
Date: 2/24/2017 10:00:00 PM
Hey Donna. : ) Thank you.
Date: 1/2/2017 6:37:00 PM
Congrats!!! my friend...a great narrative...god bless...^WW^
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Doug Vinson
Date: 1/3/2017 8:02:00 AM
A'ight den, WW. : )
Date: 1/2/2017 4:40:00 PM
Doug, congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win on this amazing narrative! And, Happy New Year to you! Sandra
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Doug Vinson
Date: 1/3/2017 8:01:00 AM
Gracias, Sandra! And yes - here comes 2017...<~~Amazing.
Date: 1/2/2017 8:59:00 AM
Congrats. On your win, Doug! I could truly relate to the events in your narrative poem. Age gives us a unique perspective on life's happenings and how we arrived at the present... Look forward to reading more of your poetry. Kathy
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Doug Vinson
Date: 1/2/2017 11:38:00 AM
Thank you, Kathy. How did we arrive at the present? Seems impossible to forecast ahead of time, for most of us, but in looking back it makes sense.
Date: 1/2/2017 3:02:00 AM
F***, that is a twist. A great narrative poem. A thoughtful start to my morning...Thanks, Kai
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Date: 1/2/2017 11:36:00 AM
Cheers, Kai. Many passings....
Date: 1/1/2017 4:23:00 PM
Great story - congrats Doug! :-)
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Doug Vinson
Date: 1/1/2017 9:45:00 PM
Ahoy, Mark. : ) I appreciate that, Sir. Cheers, Doug.
Date: 1/1/2017 9:04:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Doug. Great take on the prompt!
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Doug Vinson
Date: 1/1/2017 9:43:00 PM
Thank you, Agnes. I had previously written a much longer, and much more fictional piece titled, "The Day After Christmas," including the same themes.
Date: 1/1/2017 8:30:00 AM
In a way, a reader can almost feel a sense of dread that a tragedy of some sort is coming, because how else would a good coming of age story end. But the last stanza hits just the same. Truly magnificent, Doug!
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Doug Vinson
Date: 1/1/2017 9:35:00 PM
Cheers, Tamal. : ) I think the "Void" is with us, even as we conceptualize, and as we begin to write, at times. Is that good or bad? I suppose it just "is."
Date: 12/31/2016 12:30:00 AM
Donnie kept with us that first month into the new year,..//.. the pile of trees growing in the bottom of The Hollow...//.. He told us things, we told him things,..//.. we asked him things and he told us more...//.. That is just so wonderfully described, endearing in a strange sort of way, something that makes me smile.
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Doug Vinson
Date: 1/1/2017 9:39:00 PM
Cheers, Darren. :: fills cup with the Nectar of the Gods; drinks deep.... ::
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Darren White
Date: 12/31/2016 11:32:00 PM
Woo hoo Doug, you won!!!! Gratis with the little beautiful icon thingy :)
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/31/2016 12:56:00 AM
: ) We really did drag the Christmas trees to the bridge and throw them over, and we really did know slightly older guys who went to Vietnam and died. In 2017 or 2018 it will be 50 years.
Date: 12/30/2016 6:24:00 AM
A story within a story. That one magic month with Donnie would be a fabled memory, his giving his life for all. Best wishes for the New Year, Rainbow.
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/30/2016 8:39:00 PM
Cheers, Rainbow. : ) Almost a 100% true story, coming up on the half-century mark.
Date: 12/26/2016 1:07:00 PM
Beautiful piece!!! I found it really intriguing but still quite sad :(
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/26/2016 2:54:00 PM
Hi Keshan, thank you. Gone forever...
Date: 12/25/2016 11:11:00 PM
Wow!! Gripping Doug!! I don't fancy long poems... I'm just too blonde and my ADD kicks in ;) but this... you had my attention from the start!! Heartbreaking ending. *tear* love your work... Big Hugggs!! Deb
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/26/2016 11:54:00 AM
Thanks, Deb. I do see the attraction of shorter things - it's nice if it fits on one view of the web page, for starters.... ; )
Date: 12/25/2016 2:03:00 PM
ohh, what a different slant for the theme, doug... this is sadly beautiful!..huggs
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/26/2016 11:42:00 AM
Thank you, Nette. : ) Things end.

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