The Crofter's Moon

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There's a chilly air where it used to shine
There's a misty breeze through the purple vine.

In a fading summer tick-tock sounds
 move backwards marking every hour

Darkness falls down slowly upon each longer night
Stealing beewax gold of sunset's soft -glow light.

Against total eclipse, Foliage silhouettes make their return back 
Bringing to his arms  a Lunar death ...  Her death.

Along empty walks, earthy drops drizzle regret
Regret with every footstep and  heavy inward breath

Regret... Drops  Thunder...  Thunder and death
Death !  Dead !      Gone ..  Gone....    

Or does She live in his forevermore

Is that her reflection  mirroring  affection
Is it her hidden face that glistens in the lake

Is that the crescent moon that once showed him the way
A way to feel    to feel again what it is like to dance and sway

Sway to lilting music nobody else could hear
to flow adrift in  silent pause ,knowing She' s still there. 

Knowing she is with him hovering in dreams,
beaming  radiant shadows all over his cheeks

Believing  She'll get closer without owning his lips
Because their  bond was deeper than just a simple kiss.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 1/1/2017 7:42:00 AM
This made me cry.. I love it
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Date: 10/11/2016 5:43:00 AM
Stunning! A Fav.
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Date: 9/9/2016 4:27:00 PM
Love falling into your poems, Char, nice work! jim
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Date: 9/6/2016 6:26:00 PM
Ahh how very gorgeous lovely read
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Date: 8/26/2016 3:19:00 AM
Very beautiful poem....
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Date: 8/24/2016 5:34:00 PM
Terrific! I am speechless :) 7
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Date: 8/22/2016 8:50:00 AM
Wow! You never cease to amaze us!
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Date: 8/19/2016 1:11:00 PM
A 7 and a fav, Charm:) A beautiful and touching poem; superb ending. Sorry I can't comment on the audio....my computer has gone mute! Regards // paul
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Date: 8/19/2016 3:58:00 AM
Your voice and your poem was entrancing Charmaine! You have out done yourself in this masterpiece of a poem. I just think it brilliant! I must fave it my friend! 7 ; )
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Date: 8/17/2016 9:24:00 PM
Charma, i so envy your getting to go to a beach!! Let me see if I can find any new poems of yours to read.
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Date: 8/15/2016 7:01:00 AM
What a way to end such an elegant poem. I was rapt from the start.
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Date: 8/14/2016 4:04:00 PM
Wow Charma you have blown my mind with this beautiful emotional poem... and we need to hang on to our dreams, the final couplet is an absolutely perfect ending:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/14/2016 3:04:00 PM
Hi Charmaine, Your muse has definitely returned. This is so beautiful yet sad. It very poetic. The last two lines were so profound as well passionate. Love is much more than physical contact. Excellent job. A without a doubt seven and a fav:-) Alexis
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Date: 8/14/2016 10:31:00 AM
oh I just love that ending, well the whole poem of course. But to hover, not being able to kiss, knowing the love is so much more than that. Awesome
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Date: 8/13/2016 7:42:00 AM
Charmaine...there are things deeper than touch....your last line is so powerful...so true. Lovely write, my dear....with a tinge of sadness. Hugs from Cyprus.
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Date: 8/12/2016 10:20:00 AM
Very interesting write Charmaine. The last couplet puts a warm twist on the gentle sadness of the poem.
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Date: 8/12/2016 6:14:00 AM
Very sad. It evokes a feeling of loss but her memory won't fade but the memories are a good thing and will stay with him until he meets her again. I had to read this a few times to get it. If I did...I'll be back again I'm sure...a fav
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 8/13/2016 1:43:00 AM
Yes..I revised it , as Ruben suggested..I swapped some lines, and added some words like Lunar death to Her death... and Sunset to the beewax gold ..Before I didnt use sunset..but maybe that was to vague for people to read what was in my mind..So glad now you can see better after my revision .: )
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Tim Smith
Date: 8/12/2016 3:37:00 PM
Now that you told me it is so obvious....I was looking way too deep when it was sitting right there on top for me to see
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 8/12/2016 3:28:00 PM
Its about the crescent moon (metaphorically) ..and the crofter/sheperd/farmer...Its about Autumn coming too soon..Its about darkness too early...Moon gone too...But the moon will revisit the Crofter in his dreams.
Date: 8/12/2016 2:47:00 AM
Nice intensity Charmaine, good solid repetitions emphasising the key points, rolls well and entices the reader into the heart of the write, ....the word " owing" in the second last line could easily be " owning" to shift the emphasis ? ...well done ...Markian x
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Date: 8/11/2016 9:56:00 PM
I always know I will enjoy a poem by Charmaine! So beautiful!
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Date: 8/11/2016 7:30:00 PM
Very cool form, Char! Love it! jimbo
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