The Breeze of Time

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This metaphorically speaking write has been written with the reader in mind and will be able to interpret it their way and view. It’s well versed and well-penned to read. I’m sure you’ll be pleased to read this piece. My very first metaphorical piece was written in my 20 years of writing. For me and being my first writing like this, gives me a sense of pride, that my approach is dancing on the imaginations of the mind.

The Breeze of Time The breezes of the break of dawn, Will speak, so, listen deeply, with your heart? Shh, can you hear her voice? Some even say the touch of her skies' breath, Caresses thy skin in the deep of the day, Seen by the dance upon the waters rift. Her gown draped down as a whirl. Fierce were her words, As she ripped across her runway. Back and forth, across emotions of earth, Two worlds at a touch. All the time, just rotating, The breezes of time. I walked into the sun, And thousands did I see.

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Donna Roberts

Date: 5/12/2020 10:19:00 PM

Lovely

William Darnell Sr.
Date: 5/15/2020 6:07:00 PM

Thank you as well, Ms. Donna. Have a good evening. Best of Wishes, William

Funom Makama

Date: 4/30/2020 2:07:00 AM

Creativity at its best, passion digging deepest. Your voice is powerful here. What an excellent piece.

William Darnell Sr.
Date: 4/30/2020 4:57:00 AM

Thank you very much for this review, Funom. It's me, growing as the writer, that I'd like to become. I'm grateful for your words of encouragement. It gives me a greater sense of accomplishment. Best of Wishes, William

Sandra Adams

Date: 4/26/2020 9:22:00 AM

this one allowed me to place myself in the scene...I love sunrises, sunsets and being in nature and often use nature as metaphors... nice penning...I enjoyed!

William Darnell Sr.
Date: 4/26/2020 9:45:00 AM

Hi Sandra, thank you. It's taken me long enough to write it, being my first metaphorical poem. The sun threw you off. But, as I did say, for the reader in mind and to view their way. It's the tornado, for clarity. And thank you for your encouraging words. We are all here to help each other grow as writers, poets, and poetesses. Best of Wishes, William