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The Box I lept out from the box then promptly thereafter, I sensed the bearing of iron, flick flit arrested eyes to study, imagined it be journey's end, 'twas a lit past to ponder an encrypted life lived. ~0~ A stained-glass existence, purposed distractions drafted into some colorful repose upon a natural light of prominent finery crafty guise while the setting laced by topics of truth that cast a shade like its lonesome hue that borders it as an unembellished sin. ~0~ My instructors of contempt, homework that imbued through ink also, gratuitous blood, now seeps and fleets in pulsative actions of the veinuous tracked memory, via recalls unlike inanimate vehicles of value but, a faint twist of wishing it dead, matured soul am I--learned. ~0~ True love's, known by passion, and death. ~0~ Hence, I am confidently tethered to the box, open to stray anew experiences that enthusiastically entertains in future's promises, as society embraces harmony in measured sweet spoonfuls, naught to indulge, but be indebted to fine attributes that lives exemplary for an aged somebody naught sit but rise above the box. ~0~ In times end my soul depart earth to return inside a box. 2020 October 27 *1st Place* COMPLETELY YOUR CHOICE(38) any theme any form ~~Brian Strand *7th Place* Inward Reflections ~~Chantelle Anne Cooke

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Brian Sambourne

Date: 11/15/2020 2:30:00 PM

So many strong, memorable lines like "stained glass existence." Well done. Sincerely Brian

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/15/2020 2:50:00 PM

I appreciate your overwhelming observant sharing, Brian, Aloha!

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 11/7/2020 1:33:00 PM

Congrats on your top win! great write! In times end my soul depart earth to return inside a box. True!!

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/7/2020 1:38:00 PM

Thank you, Krish, a trailing lead to a fitting end, Aloha!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/7/2020 4:28:00 AM

Creative winning work. Way to go. I really like the picture. If I was inside the box, going out would be very scary. Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/7/2020 9:19:00 AM

Thank you, Sara, for your wondrous sharing, and kind accolade, Aloha!

Anisha Dutta

Date: 11/5/2020 7:38:00 PM

Always feel happy to see on TOP of rank. This poem has touched EXCELLENCE. CONGRATS.

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/5/2020 7:42:00 PM

Thank you beautiful, Anisha, a friend always, Aloha!

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/2/2020 11:33:00 AM

Wow William. This one is really poignant and provocative. Congratulations on the win! Linda

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/2/2020 11:37:00 AM

My grateful thanks, Linda, always a pleasure, Aloha!

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/1/2020 11:05:00 AM

William, the last stanza is so impactful and a grand finale to an rich, exquisite poem filled with the moving metaphorical beauty and tender imagery of your self-reflection. Congratulations for your excellent win in Chantelle's contest.. ~Susan

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/1/2020 11:22:00 AM

I am truly grateful, Susan, for your discernments and accolade, albeit, yours is marvelously compelling, entwined with impressive symbolism, my compliments on your worthy trophy, Aloha!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 11/1/2020 9:30:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, William. Your use of words to create so many memorable images is amazing - "a stained glass existence." I agree with Andrea - your last stanza holds such depth of meaning as does the story of "the box!" Aloha my friend!

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/1/2020 10:49:00 AM

Your notable insights are wondrously absorbing, Sam, I am truly grateful, Aloha!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/1/2020 9:16:00 AM

Now that I know more about you, this poem makes even more sense to me, William. I love the image you chose to go with your self-reflection of that box opening to the sky of blue. The ending of this poem takes a double meaning for me. I love that. Congrats on your win.

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/1/2020 10:35:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea, for your admirable intuitions as they truly shed a light worth, Aloha!

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/27/2020 12:02:00 PM

I found this quite moving William. Well done! Linda

Hilo Poet
Date: 10/27/2020 5:04:00 PM

My dutiful, Linda, thank you, Aloha! William