The Battle Within

Clawing from the base of the abysmal tomb
Scraping knuckles bleed from bitter fight
Spent muscles strain against restraint
Lungs wheeze and struggle for sustaining breath
As the heart’s mass shrinks within its chest
Once outside, the form at last seems free

But freedom isn’t granted so easily

A life dangles in precarious balance
Over the ledge of sanity’s precipice
Nearly toppled by the weight of dread
All may be lost if one single shred of hope
Fails to gleam into this despondent place
For nearly to the end of faith they’ve come

This human in the ticking time bomb race

So excruciatingly the soul is bound
So surely and completely gripped, it is
By deathly ills which ensnared the waiting one
With vines of tangled, twisted lies
So many that the person became numb
And against the evils of this world became

Ever unprepared and did succumb


©Donna Golden

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 1/25/2010 6:50:00 PM
High class Donna. Congratulations on your feature. Sincerely, love Moses
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Date: 1/25/2010 11:05:00 AM
Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 1/25/2010 8:42:00 AM
Oh yes, I remember this amazing poem, and believe it is one of your best! Congratulations on having his here on the featured page this week! A wonderful poem to read again!~ Carrie
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Date: 1/25/2010 8:19:00 AM
Congrats on your feature poem this week Donna Rgds Brian
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Date: 1/24/2010 9:27:00 PM
Congrats Donna on your featured poem on the Soup this week... excellent choice.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 1/24/2010 3:08:00 PM
The vivid imagery conveys you thoughts in a powerful way. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you ongoing success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 1/24/2010 1:59:00 PM
Many congratulations in you deserved featured poem this week, Donna >> James
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Date: 1/24/2010 1:41:00 PM
Congratulations are your well deserved featured poem this week Donna. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/3/2009 6:28:00 AM
Donna Congrats!! Love Light Truth Patricia
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Date: 10/2/2009 12:18:00 PM
Amazing write, best of luck in the next round...Raul
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Date: 10/2/2009 12:17:00 PM
2 great entires, best of luck...Raul
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Date: 9/29/2009 5:46:00 AM
This is a very deep and moving piece, Donna. Your title is perfect. Congratulation on your triple! Best of luck in the finals with all your beautiful poetry! Love, Robin
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Date: 9/25/2009 2:22:00 PM
Congrats!! Love Light Truth Patricia
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Date: 9/25/2009 4:10:00 AM
Dear Donna, Best wishes through to the next round. Love Lainie
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Date: 9/24/2009 12:06:00 PM
Donna, congratulations in getting past round one of the competition, good luck >> James,x
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Date: 9/24/2009 9:16:00 AM
Well done, Donna best wishes in the next rounds with your poems.Rgds Brian
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Date: 1/30/2009 2:23:00 AM
Wow. Such encapturing imagery. Really...just..wow....
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Date: 1/27/2009 4:02:00 AM
The second satnza rocks! Balance, precipice, single shred of hope..the lines / words really makes the reader sit on edge waiting to see where the voice in the poem will lead. Great imagery.
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Date: 1/26/2009 3:36:00 AM
Hi Donna this poem is well written and I found it to be rather profound - Great word choice in this piece - god Bless, MJ
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Date: 1/25/2009 2:00:00 PM
Hello Donna.. thoughtful and deep writing really enjoyed reading this ! Thank you for your comment on Spare Car Keys a poem from a very sad time in my past.... thanks again
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Date: 1/25/2009 1:07:00 PM
Visceral feelings expressed here. Your words grip the reader's throat and doesn't let go. Your third stanza is dynamite, knock-out brilliant. It sets the stage for your resolution of emotions penned in your last verse. Kudos to you on this raw and relevant write. Peace and hugs, John
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Date: 1/25/2009 8:54:00 AM
Living can be such a battleground of pain and struggle, fear and dread, birth does not prepare us....so well written, Donna...excellent, dark, painful writing...yet so well done! ~ Love, Carrie
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Date: 1/25/2009 8:45:00 AM
Aren't we all somewhat unprepared. Such an excellent write. A battle many of us fight, some more often, more fierce, than others. Well done. Love, Shar
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Date: 1/25/2009 12:43:00 AM
Great write, Donna, from the first to the last word. I love the way that, despite the warnings and dark elements of the scene, the light of hope burns brightly. Awesome! Love, Nigel
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Date: 1/24/2009 7:13:00 PM
Nice words and great structure. I've Scraped my knuckles a time or two...Raul
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