The Bath

The Bath

My mother arrives
Letting in briefly
the dim Cleveland sun.
Her fingers are red-raw.

Without listening 
I know my job
And I get the worn pliers
Landlord-loaned
To turn on the bath.

My brother stands
Jittery and exposed
While the water runs too hot
Over his feet.
He sits without warning,
Used to the pain.

He is clean.
I put a towel around him.

After the water has drained
We listen carefully,
My brother’s face
Gleefully bright.

There it is!
There is the clucking rasp
Of mother’s snore,
Measured yet unpredictable sounds.
We cling to them
In muted joy.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 5/21/2020 11:00:00 AM
Excellent write indeed.
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Date: 11/30/2019 9:18:00 AM
You paint with the perfect amount of detail.
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Date: 11/23/2019 7:46:00 PM
"There is the clucking rasp Of mother’s snore, Measured yet unpredictable sounds. We cling to them In muted joy." Such simple details make this so rich. Loved this poem.
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Date: 2/8/2018 7:21:00 PM
What a lovely poem. Leaves you wanting more. Superbly done, Douglas.
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Date: 1/19/2018 3:02:00 PM
This is a remarkable poem. I love the quirky details mentioned. I love the "borrowed pliers to turn on the faucet" and "clucking rasp". Usually on this site, I read generalizations and near cliches. I am so tired of commenting "show" don't "tell". If modern poetry has anything to offer it's that the meaningfulness is found in everyday details. Congratulations of this fine work.
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Date: 1/3/2018 1:45:00 PM
...I feel like a bit of a voyeur in this story. Beautiful, well, I think it is.
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