That was Then, this is Now

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April- 15- 2024
It was Then, this is Now Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Ink Empress
~ Placed First~

 

Once, 
I saw rainbows, 
across the tear washed sky. 
Their iridescent gleam
illumining the astral realm 
and spilling down into the waters below. 
Buds burgeoning on every branch, 
Flowers opening their delicate folds, 
and summer bees spiraling around,
gathering nectar for frosty days.

Saw radiant smiles gleaming past,
angelic babes’ innocent face, 
Men toiling from dawn to dusk
going about their lives’ odyssey, 
Speeding vehicles moving down 
as ants, in an unbroken chain, 
Nature, posing from time to time
in silken green, amber gold
and in dazzling white	

Everything fleeted past,
as through the window
of a speeding train.
Neither did they linger long
nor were they daubed bright
in paints variegated,
on my mind's impressionable canvas
to call them back to mind at will.

I lived my life in acute haste.
Colors, shades and myriad scenes
passed me by as common sight

But now with a heavy mist blocking out my sight
and an inexorable darkness
covering me like a shroud, 
plunging me, all of a sudden, into a perpetual night
where sun beams never again shall fall,
I realize with a jolt, how much I have missed
and how much more I will miss!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 5/5/2024 11:35:00 AM
Oh dear valsa, as i read the opening lines in this, i was wondering who could this be! Impressive opening really! The kind of opening i would write too! So good! I love how descriptive your poem is while expressing innermost emotions in the most seamless manner with creative diction and metaphors! Youv done an exquisite job with this one! And the ending is so very soul touching! And so beautiful! I think theres many that can resonate with that! Too many lines in this stood out for me! I appreciate you supporting my contest! Thank you! For this beautiful entry! Congratulations on your top win! A fave it is
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Date: 5/6/2024 9:50:00 PM
Thanks a lot dear Empress for your kind and uplifting comment. I always am lifted up in spirit receiving such soulful and enlivening words of encouragement from you. Thank you so much for your largesse of heart to treat the average poets too at a high level and make them feel so good. Thanks also for the great placement given.
Date: 4/18/2024 9:05:00 AM
We all would miss a lot. But we should focus on what makes us happy. "I lived my life in acute haste. Colors, shades and myriad scenes passed me by as common sight." Words smooth like star's skin. "Nature, posing from time to time in silken green, amber gold and in dazzling white." Nature has some cute pose. Cheers, dear Valsa.
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Date: 4/17/2024 6:49:00 AM
- A beautiful poem, Valsa ... a touching last verse - hugs
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Date: 4/17/2024 5:41:00 AM
so beautiful, deep and touching poem, don't regret the past, make the present more "light", enjoyed your gréaceful poem yann
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Date: 4/16/2024 10:23:00 AM
"I lived my life in acute haste. Colors, shades and myriad scenes passed me by as common sight" -- lovely imagery, Valsa; "I realize with a jolt, how much I have missed and how much more I will miss!" -- Just my opinion, but we see what we are able to see, each and every incarnation. The mystery and wonder will continue infinite. Lovely poetry, heartfelt with incredible honesty. And skill. Have a great day my friend!
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Date: 4/15/2024 11:36:00 AM
A beautiful poem contrasting past and present. Love the theme. GL in contest.
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Date: 4/15/2024 11:05:00 AM
Your poetry's path is that of the one true light that enlightens the soul, mind, and heart, dear Valsa. Regrettably, the global community has rapidly descended into darkness; may those seeking this salvation discover it. There is a colossal difference between the old and the new. A beautifully crafted poem full of striking imagery. At times, life might swallow us whole, weighing us down with obligations and chores until our illusions fade away.
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Date: 4/15/2024 9:51:00 AM
This world is sadly going towards darkness faster and faster, blessed are those which seek this source and come out from among the darkness. To walk in the only true lighted path , that shines in the heart, mind and souls, we love ya, take care,
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Date: 4/15/2024 7:31:00 AM
Beautiful imagery Valsa, Blindness is a terrible affliction. I wouldn't be able to cope with it. Had an eye test recently and my optician found the start of cataracts in its early stages. I wear sunglasses now when it's bright. Hope you're keeping well and good luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 4/15/2024 5:20:00 AM
How sad to think it took losing one's sight in order to appreciate the beauty that is evident all around us. Powerful writing Valsa!
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Date: 4/15/2024 4:11:00 AM
Sometimes life does overtake us and enshrouds us with things, things to do and things to get done and takes away our rainbows. I like the last two lines how you are given the opportunity to change the situation in which you are now seemingly trapped but can change for the better. I am supposing it could be meaning you personally or maybe just a situation you see happening to the whole world. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
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Date: 4/15/2024 1:41:00 AM
What a contrast between the past and the present. A perfect poem that is filled with great imagery. Best for a win. Hugs.
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Date: 4/15/2024 1:10:00 AM
Loved this poem, very soothing!
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