That Night On the Phone

The conversation would have pleasantly gone
But the perfect I had need to blunder
"By the way," I sigh
"I want to be a writer."
Silence. Aggravating silence as I wait
For the voice on the other line
When finally after what seemed like years,
Nearing eons. Nerve -wracking stretch 
Of palpitating eons, you answered
"So that was it? You are throwing
Your life away, just like that?"
Now it was my turn to be still
Quietly, quietly still as I breathe in and out.
Somewhere the crickets began to croak
The ebbing moonlight casts shadows on my face
Still, I thought, no hope is lost -
I fiddled my hair before I spoke
"This is what I want, I need.
And if you ask, I am not sure if I will succeed
But I wish for your blessings, Pa
Please? Would you do me this one great favor?
Would you be happy for me?
Would you support me on this endeavor?"
I held my drying tongue, my heart
Felt like it has run
A thousand marathons, my head
Just hurts like hell
But I was wrong -  it was not yet hell.
Before I heard what you dread to tell,
There was a click, the receiver fell
A busy tone ensued.
The resounding busy tone was all I heard.

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Written on: 3/4/2011
Written for : Hey...Mr. Editor! Contest by John Heck
Honorable mention

6/1/2011
Old Poem Contest by Destroyer Poet
8th place

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Date: 6/2/2011 5:35:00 AM
Congrats on your well deserved win in Poet Destroyer's contest Jan. Love, Carol
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Jan Camille Tongco
Date: 6/3/2011 9:19:00 PM
thanks carol. =)
Date: 6/2/2011 12:34:00 AM
grats on your awesome contest entry Luv*Skat
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Jan Camille Tongco
Date: 6/3/2011 9:20:00 PM
thanks for reading my poem, skat =)
Date: 6/1/2011 5:51:00 PM
Jan!~ CONGRATULATIONS!! with your poem in my old entry contest:-) Thank you very much for supporting my awesome contest. I had so much fun reading each and every entry. I'm glad you where among all my chosen winners. Keep posting your good poems,..p.d.
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Jan Camille Tongco
Date: 6/3/2011 9:19:00 PM
thank you for the placement. really happy to get to join this contests. i have been unable to write any new poems in the last months, so I am really glad to get to see such a contest. hope for more of your contests to come --- Camille ^_^
Date: 6/1/2011 1:53:00 PM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of p.d.,
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Jan Camille Tongco
Date: 6/3/2011 9:20:00 PM
thanks, dr. mehta
Date: 6/1/2011 1:17:00 PM
congrats Jan on your excellent win in this contest with an excellent entry luv..enjoy..
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Jan Camille Tongco
Date: 6/3/2011 9:21:00 PM
thanks linda =)
Date: 3/9/2011 9:06:00 AM
Hi Jan. Many congrat's on your well-deserved win. Lainie
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Date: 3/9/2011 9:05:00 AM
Hi Jan. Many congrat's on your well-deserved win. Lainie
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Date: 3/7/2011 11:57:00 PM
It's sad. And you told it VERY well. I really love this one! CAn you imagine telling them you were gay or something. Some parents cannot accept anything about their kids that goes against what THEY think is acceptable. So sad.
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Date: 3/7/2011 12:16:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning poem in John Heck's "Hey...Mr. Editor" contest Jan. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/7/2011 5:23:00 AM
This is really moving, Jan-- can't help but hear that busy tone myself-- what a very real and heartfelt poem-- if your father could read this, I do hope he has given his blessing? way to go for you for being among John's winners--nikko
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Date: 3/6/2011 6:18:00 PM
Beautiful job Jan. Good to see your honored poem's success in the contest.
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Date: 3/6/2011 4:42:00 PM
That spark of hope, that burst like a hopeful dream shattered....so intense and heart felt! Well written....and indeed you are a writer!! I hope you have received some kind of blessing? :) Congratulations on your honorable win!!
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Date: 3/6/2011 3:19:00 PM
Nice work, Jan. Congratulations on your success in the contest. Best wishes, Carolyn
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Date: 3/6/2011 3:07:00 PM
Congratulations on your fine win in John's Contest. Annalise
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Date: 3/6/2011 12:50:00 PM
Super congrats Jan on your stupendous win in John's contest with your HM.. enjoy your very special honor with luv..luv..
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