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Angel ... Tread soft near me, pray thee ... tread light and soft ... shall I yet awaken to the buffet of your wings? Come, night, those diaphanous pinions to enfold me, trembling, and bleed the will from my flesh. Dare you barter the moon to squander time with such a worldly creature? Oh, what madness, this? Your heavenly covenant in ruin, to just once drink deep the mix of this mouth and thy starlit tresses, spilling ... A love forbidden and a passion, insatiate, draws naught but pure poison. Let that bane be our undoing ... entwined, delirious, falling ... tumbling ... One. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Brian's Choice 3, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Sonia Walker

Date: 5/6/2020 8:25:00 AM

Gregory, powerful imagery is captured within your poem. Congratulations on your placement. ~ Sonia

L. J. Carber

Date: 5/5/2020 1:20:00 PM

This is pretty damn good, Greg-- a winner in my book! Great imagery

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/5/2020 11:10:00 PM

Thank you so much, LJ, I greatly appreciate it, my friend! You're the only comment on this poem since July '17, so it means a lot. :o)

Edward Mccall

Date: 7/7/2017 9:35:00 AM

Nicely done Greg you have captured the seductive lure of temptation so well very enjoyable read.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/9/2017 12:50:00 AM

Thank you very much, Edward ... this is my favorite genre, and I'm honored that you liked this one, my friend!

Carole Duet

Date: 7/1/2017 12:31:00 PM

Wow, Greg! This is such a glorious passionate poem. Loved it.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/1/2017 5:39:00 PM

That's very sweet of you, Carole - this is my favorite genre ... I really love the gently dark and sensual, especially the ones that have some mystery to them, and leave much to the reader's imagination. Thanks for the kind words! :-)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/28/2017 5:50:00 AM

:) Loved the feel in this poem...the forbidden has a special allure, as your poem clearly shows.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/28/2017 6:48:00 AM

Thank you so much, Eileen ... very sweet of you - I'm glad you liked it! :-)