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Teenage Love

I'm in love; racing heartbeats and cheeks hot. Strange, this feeling, where out of sense I'm brought Instead of tea, sugar I pour in pot. Baby brother is neglected in cot. Lonely places now I seek for my thought. The sensible ones seem to me but snot. My homework and classes are all for naught. My whole being with ecstasy is wrought. Confused emotions hold my nerves all taut. How long will I bear this state of distraught? Cunning Cupid takes delight with his shot, While I'm all tied for good in a tight knot! 23/08/16 Contest: monorhyme mania - John Hamilton - Place 5 120 syllables, 10 per line. (on howmanysyllables.com)

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 8/31/2016 8:44:00 AM

Congrats Sunita, for your placement in the contest!! ;-)

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/31/2016 10:15:00 AM

Thanks Teddy, for the visit and nice comment! :D Sunita

Lu Loo

Date: 8/30/2016 3:39:00 PM

Sunita, a lovely poem! congrats on your placement! :)-luloo

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/31/2016 8:17:00 AM

Thanks Laura for reading and for the appreciation. :) Sunita

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 8/29/2016 11:20:00 PM

Thanks John for the inspiring contest and for appreciating my poem. Congrats to you and all the winners for their wonderful write. Good day! Sunita

Winged Warrior

Date: 8/29/2016 5:09:00 PM

Congrats!!! on your write my friend...god bless...^WW^

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/29/2016 11:21:00 PM

Thanks WW for stopping by and leaving such nice comment. Do appreciate. Sunita :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/29/2016 3:02:00 PM

Hi Sunita , How well do I remember those teenage years. You took me down memory lane with write. Congratulations on your winning write. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/29/2016 11:23:00 PM

Oh yes, teenage days are unforgettable...thanks for the visit and kind comment. :) Sunita

Matthew Anish

Date: 8/28/2016 7:28:00 PM

Remind me of the song with the lyrics - "don't know much about history - don't know much about biology - but I do know that I love you.." That song dates back to the early sixties I believe but the more things change the more they stay the same! Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/28/2016 10:17:00 PM

:D :D Glad it takes you back in time and honoring my work with such a famous song. True...for every teenage its a new world discovered of which none knew the existence..this is what is unique about adolescence...innocence!Thanks for the read and wonderful comment. Sunita

Pashang Salehi

Date: 8/28/2016 1:36:00 AM

Simply beautiful.

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/28/2016 4:17:00 AM

Thanks for the read and appreciation. :) Sunita

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/26/2016 9:19:00 PM

Spot-on description of a teenager who's got it bad--love! Janice

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/26/2016 11:36:00 PM

:D Ya this is bit a strange phase of growth! Thanks for the read Janice. Love Sunita

Paul Callus

Date: 8/25/2016 9:36:00 AM

This must be the longest monorhyme that I've read so far, Sunita! No wonder, since describing teenage years and love can be never ending:) Wishing you all the best with the early phases of parenthood! // paul

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/25/2016 11:17:00 AM

Oh Thanks for the nice comment. We've been a bit difficult too at teenage, at time I wish to go back in time to make it again where I hurt my parents and this gives me more patience while coping with my adolescents now for I know this should be the wonderful phase of their life too and I must not spoil it. I wrote this thinking of the youngest, my daughter, 16! :D Sunita

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/25/2016 2:39:00 AM

Those teen years are the hardest for both parent and teen. I am so glad my children are past that phase in life. You described it with creative clarity Sunita! 7 ; )

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/25/2016 8:04:00 AM

Oh great...I'm still in that phase of my parenthood...but coping with lots of patience...:D Thanks for the nice comment Connie. Love Sunita :)

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

Date: 8/25/2016 12:40:00 AM

Great write Sunita - takes me back in time. Mark

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/25/2016 8:02:00 AM

Thanks for the read and nice comment...appreciate you like it. :) Sunita

Eve Roper

Date: 8/24/2016 1:04:00 PM

This is wonderful monorhyme, Sunita... if not a winner, it is already in my mind....10+++++:)

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/24/2016 10:10:00 PM

Thanks Eve, I'm really touched you stopped by and appreciated my poem. I feel honoured to learn from you experienced writers....and a pleasure to write for contest though I'm struggling a lot to understand forms of poetry! :D Sunita

Daniel Turner

Date: 8/23/2016 4:20:00 PM

Take my word for it. It's not love, it's infatuation. BIG difference. Get back to your homework, young lady! Lol That's my dad imitation. I remember my daughter going through the same thing, Sunita. Your poem made me smile. Don't rush your life!

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/23/2016 10:22:00 PM

Glad it pleased you and true...as parents we reason so much...when our ados just look at us as oldies???...my God who can reason with a teenager in love!! the worst phase of my parenthood! :D Thanks for the read and nice comment. :) Sunita

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/23/2016 4:06:00 PM

It does sound like an anguished teenager all right! All the angst they have! Good luck in the contest. And I am leaving the building now!! (going home for the day)

Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/23/2016 10:17:00 PM

Thanks Andrea for the read and valuable opinion. I'm glad it succeeded in imparting the teenager's POV. :) Love Sunita.