Sunita U.D Palawon Poet Monorhyme

Teenage Love

I'm in love;  racing heartbeats  and  cheeks  hot.
 Strange, this feeling, where out of sense I'm brought
 Instead  of tea,  sugar  I  pour   in   pot.
 Baby  brother is  neglected   in   cot.
 Lonely   places   now  I  seek   for  my  thought. 
 The  sensible  ones  seem   to  me  but  snot.
 My  homework   and   classes  are  all   for   naught.
 My  whole   being   with   ecstasy  is  wrought.
 Confused  emotions  hold my nerves  all taut.
 How  long   will  I  bear  this  state  of  distraught? 
 Cunning   Cupid  takes  delight   with  his  shot, 
 While   I'm   all   tied   for   good   in  a  tight   knot!


23/08/16
Contest: monorhyme mania - John Hamilton - Place 5
120 syllables, 10 per line. 
(on howmanysyllables.com)

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Teddy Kimathi August 31, 2016 at 8:44 AM Congrats Sunita, for your placement in the contest!! ;-) Sunita U.D Palawon August 31, 2016 at 10:15 AM Thanks Teddy, for the visit and nice comment! :D Sunita

Beautiful Scars August 30, 2016 at 3:39 PM Sunita, a lovely poem! congrats on your placement! :)-luloo Sunita U.D Palawon August 31, 2016 at 8:17 AM Thanks Laura for reading and for the appreciation. :) Sunita

Sunita U.D Palawon August 29, 2016 at 11:20 PM Thanks John for the inspiring contest and for appreciating my poem. Congrats to you and all the winners for their wonderful write. Good day! Sunita

Winged Warrior August 29, 2016 at 5:09 PM Congrats!!! on your write my friend...god bless...^WW^ Sunita U.D Palawon August 29, 2016 at 11:21 PM Thanks WW for stopping by and leaving such nice comment. Do appreciate. Sunita :)

Alexis Y. August 29, 2016 at 3:02 PM Hi Sunita , How well do I remember those teenage years. You took me down memory lane with write. Congratulations on your winning write. It was well deserved: -) Alexis Sunita U.D Palawon August 29, 2016 at 11:23 PM Oh yes, teenage days are unforgettable...thanks for the visit and kind comment. :) Sunita

Matthew Anish August 28, 2016 at 7:28 PM Remind me of the song with the lyrics - "don't know much about history - don't know much about biology - but I do know that I love you.." That song dates back to the early sixties I believe but the more things change the more they stay the same! Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Sunita U.D Palawon August 28, 2016 at 10:17 PM :D :D Glad it takes you back in time and honoring my work with such a famous song. True...for every teenage its a new world discovered of which none knew the existence..this is what is unique about adolescence...innocence!Thanks for the read and wonderful comment. Sunita

Pashang Salehi August 28, 2016 at 1:36 AM Simply beautiful. Sunita U.D Palawon August 28, 2016 at 4:17 AM Thanks for the read and appreciation. :) Sunita

Janice Canerdy August 26, 2016 at 9:19 PM Spot-on description of a teenager who's got it bad--love! Janice Sunita U.D Palawon August 26, 2016 at 11:36 PM :D Ya this is bit a strange phase of growth! Thanks for the read Janice. Love Sunita

Paul Callus August 25, 2016 at 9:36 AM This must be the longest monorhyme that I've read so far, Sunita! No wonder, since describing teenage years and love can be never ending:) Wishing you all the best with the early phases of parenthood! // paul Sunita U.D Palawon August 25, 2016 at 11:17 AM Oh Thanks for the nice comment. We've been a bit difficult too at teenage, at time I wish to go back in time to make it again where I hurt my parents and this gives me more patience while coping with my adolescents now for I know this should be the wonderful phase of their life too and I must not spoil it. I wrote this thinking of the youngest, my daughter, 16! :D Sunita

Connie Marcum Wong August 25, 2016 at 2:39 AM Those teen years are the hardest for both parent and teen. I am so glad my children are past that phase in life. You described it with creative clarity Sunita! 7 ; ) Sunita U.D Palawon August 25, 2016 at 8:04 AM Oh great...I'm still in that phase of my parenthood...but coping with lots of patience...:D Thanks for the nice comment Connie. Love Sunita :)

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe August 25, 2016 at 12:40 AM Great write Sunita - takes me back in time. Mark Sunita U.D Palawon August 25, 2016 at 8:02 AM Thanks for the read and nice comment...appreciate you like it. :) Sunita

Eve Roper August 24, 2016 at 1:04 PM This is wonderful monorhyme, Sunita... if not a winner, it is already in my mind....10+++++:) Sunita U.D Palawon August 24, 2016 at 10:10 PM Thanks Eve, I'm really touched you stopped by and appreciated my poem. I feel honoured to learn from you experienced writers....and a pleasure to write for contest though I'm struggling a lot to understand forms of poetry! :D Sunita

Daniel Turner August 23, 2016 at 4:20 PM Take my word for it. It's not love, it's infatuation. BIG difference. Get back to your homework, young lady! Lol That's my dad imitation. I remember my daughter going through the same thing, Sunita. Your poem made me smile. Don't rush your life! Sunita U.D Palawon August 23, 2016 at 10:22 PM Glad it pleased you and true...as parents we reason so much...when our ados just look at us as oldies???...my God who can reason with a teenager in love!! the worst phase of my parenthood! :D Thanks for the read and nice comment. :) Sunita

Andrea Dietrich August 23, 2016 at 4:06 PM It does sound like an anguished teenager all right! All the angst they have! Good luck in the contest. And I am leaving the building now!! (going home for the day) Sunita U.D Palawon August 23, 2016 at 10:17 PM Thanks Andrea for the read and valuable opinion. I'm glad it succeeded in imparting the teenager's POV. :) Love Sunita.