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Tears for a Mother Fears for a Father gone Fate deals an unfair hand The door to youthful joy closing on adolescent shoulders imposing grown up responsibilities instead
Eyes sadly deprived See not the panorama of pursuing cloud shapes that conceal a frivolous Sun playing hide and seek behind Nor do they see the mischievous stars scurrying in and out of the path of the Moon’s orbital course causing her impatience and wrath
No skipping joyously through fields of heather startling unsuspecting butterflies No fantasy fairy fables of where one seeks an elusive four leaf clover* No Christmas present peeks under a non-existent twinkling tree No answers to eternal questions of love are sought over plucking daisy petals I love you ~ I love you not
Pushed aside let them be For the young at heart for those who see her armour doesn’t slip She has distanced herself from emotional injury Why then under a blanket of darkness do streams of tears copiously flow re-dampening a pillow already soaked from the night before? Reflections of regret as she had watched him walk away The shame of being tagged Placed in a stereotypical box Typecast with irrevocable disparaging words of ‘slag’ ‘skank' ’ whore’ Accusations cast loosely no longer ‘water off a duck’s back’ brutally now strike a hurtful blow
Did she imagine the compassion in his eyes?
No emphatic eyes have yet seen what surely is a disadvantaged life? Providing some comfort to ease the pain for a sick mother who lies dying are fraught with risks and strife
She questions yet again Could the ‘wheels of fate’ be just altered? Truth for Truth the Golden Rule Trading kisses for cigarettes is unquestionably uncool
Could Negative energy be interrupting Life’s Grand Scheme? Where hides that elusive four leaf clover? Or does it manifest to only those who dream? And there he stands nervously at the school gates A bunch of wild daisies in his hand Oblivious to the snide smirks of the others curious to see who he awaits Apprehension and remorse in his eyes Magically erased and replaced with euphoric joy When he perceives her radiant smiles Smiles that bring the curious sun out pushing through darkened clouds Illuminating the end of the tunnel bright So she can see that rare delight As her Hope intervened to send Faith And his Love conceded to intercede Fate to make amends The fairies shower luck and blessings To the four leaf clover friends
*Four leaf clover ~ the first reference to luck might be from an 11-year-old girl, who wrote in an 1877 letter to St. Nicholas Magazine - “Did the fairies ever whisper in your ear, that a four-leaf clover brought good luck to the finder”.

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Date: 11/26/2018 12:44:00 PM
Deep emotional interplay between two star-crossed souls, Maria. You put ink flesh on them, and brought them alive via your silver surfing pen. This poem herald tidings of a good beginning to a possible fairy tale ending. Splendid poetry. Love and more love always.
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Date: 11/18/2018 7:48:00 PM
Wow, Maria! You've outdone yourself with this one IMO. Such an empathetic write. Yes, we all need to take a walk (so to speak) in someone else's shoes from time to time. Finally, I love the ending...with a poetic smile. FAVED
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Date: 10/30/2018 3:53:00 PM
You made me sad, mad, and even a smile. Beautiful piece of work
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Date: 11/2/2018 9:51:00 PM
Thank you Jay, now you made me smile. Thanks for the visit and lovely comment. I haven't been much lately on PS, very busy on a new project, but hopefully that will be over soon, and I'll catch up reading all you wonderful poets ....Maria hugs
Date: 10/28/2018 12:23:00 PM
I had been meaning to come over to read part 2 of a girl named Sue, and I must say that you have done a great job, Maria! Very long poems and I are not very close friends, but I can assure you that this one kept my attention all the way through. Along the way I was touched more than once, especially by the end lines which I found positive and uplifting. ~ A fav! Best Regards // paul
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Date: 11/2/2018 9:52:00 PM
Thank you Paul, now as you know I always value your astute comments my dear friend. Thanks for the visit and wonderful support. I haven't been much lately on PS, very busy on a new project, but hopefully that will be over soon, and I'll catch up reading all you wonderful poets ....Maria hugs
Date: 10/27/2018 11:19:00 AM
Hi Maria, part two carries on the creativity from part one. This part could stand alone as a poem. As the second part of your piece it is an artistic gem, closes the piece with such a beautiful ending. You have played so well with this readers emotions. I have loved this poetic journey Maria. You craft such an excellent write. This part is also a FAVE Maria. Have a wonderful Saturday. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 11/2/2018 9:54:00 PM
Thank you Mike. Thanks for the visit and lovely comment. I haven't been much lately on PS, very busy on a new project, but hopefully that will be over soon, and I'll catch up reading all you wonderful poets ....Maria hugs
Date: 10/23/2018 9:45:00 AM
Wonderful true poetry. I am making you one of my favorite poets.
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Date: 10/24/2018 6:30:00 AM
Thanks so much Sunlite, that is so lovely of you my friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/20/2018 4:30:00 PM
I really enjoyed this poem Maria!
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Date: 10/22/2018 6:01:00 AM
Thank you Riquetta , so glad that you liked it....Maria hugs
Date: 10/17/2018 2:55:00 PM
your writing so enjoyable to read.. words can really hurt ..
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Date: 10/22/2018 6:02:00 AM
So true Eve, thanks my dear for your visit and comments. I appreciate both....Maria hugs
Date: 10/14/2018 7:51:00 PM
Maria my dear friend, this awes me to the core.. You my friend, deliver truly superbly born and magnificently crafted verses that can only be birthed from a great and true poet's spirited heart. A fav, this jewel bedazzles..
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Date: 10/15/2018 11:12:00 PM
Thanks so much my friend, but it is you who inspire many on this site. Keep writing and posting, you are needed here....Maria hugs
Date: 10/13/2018 10:31:00 AM
very emotive write. People don't always realize how much their words hurt. Some do, though, and can offer the compassion needed to change a life. I enjoyed reading this, dear Maria, you are amazing.
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Date: 10/15/2018 11:11:00 PM
Thanks Becca, so glad you did my friend. Your poetry dazzles, you are needed here, keep writing please, you inspire many:)....Maria Hugs
Date: 10/11/2018 5:02:00 AM
part one part two, I have truly enjoyed both
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:09:00 PM
Thank you, so glad that you liked it....Maria hugs
Date: 10/10/2018 10:39:00 AM
Frinken! "A", Maria...superb follow up my dear friend...a Fav too...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:10:00 PM
Lol, Frinken, a newie... I like it. So glad that you thought so WW. Love and Light too my dear friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/9/2018 5:13:00 AM
A gem of a write, dear Maria. I enjoyed reading the two parts one after the other. You amaze me with your talent for writing. Truly a fabulous free verse epic narrative. T.J
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:13:00 PM
Thank you Teppo, I appreciate your wonderful feedback and support my dear friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/5/2018 3:43:00 PM
Because we have a poetess of a generous heart, of an open enlightened mind, of a beautiful soul you blessed the "girl named Sue" with Hope and Love. You wiped out her fears and anxieties, you washed away her pain and injury and cast on her the spell of magic luck! Dear Maria, your poem is of tremendous wealth, a rainbow of emotions, a magic of fairy tales and that "plucking of daisy petals I love you, I love you not"! of our golden time! A great work worthy of rereading! A fave. Love and hugs.
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:22:00 PM
Thank you Besma, You know how I appreciate you. Your wonderful feedback, and summation goes far beyond, you spread such Love and Joy. Thank you always for the support, I truly appreciate it my dear sweet friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/4/2018 12:52:00 PM
A fairy tale ending for this powerful write, Maria. Nicely penned young lady:)
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:24:00 PM
Thank you Daniel, I so appreciate your support and friendship . Glad you liked this....Maria hugs
Date: 10/4/2018 12:17:00 PM
You have given such a happy ending to this complex poem, it certainly was a joy to read and the last two paragraphs certainly brings smile to my face, everyone deserves to be loved, especially if someone going through a hard time and your poem most beautifully described the reward of patience, at last a guy understood her,
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:25:00 PM
Thank you my little Philosopher Faraz. For a young man you are so astute, I really respect your wisdom my friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/4/2018 9:23:00 AM
I remember the touching end of the last poem. This is superbly done follow up. Grown up responsibilities for a young child..but she had faith..she knew the road to glory..and she sees the rare delight. Excellent depiction Maria. Your stories are magnificent. A Fave, indeed!
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:29:00 PM
Thanks Vijay my dear friend, so glad that you thought so, I truly appreciate your wonderful feedback, summation and faves......Maria hugs
Date: 10/4/2018 9:14:00 AM
Some events in our lives, we never forget... sometimes, well most times, these events are better to forget, rather than live in regret.... great poem from the other side of the story...
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:32:00 PM
Glad you thought so Si, yes, the other side of the story, so important to always listen to both sides before making a judgement. Thanks always for your continued support my dear friend....Maria hugs
Date: 10/4/2018 8:23:00 AM
Poetic rapture of language and imagery that leaves the reader's appetite sharpened thus asking for more! Superbly written dearest, Maria! A Fav!
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:33:00 PM
Demetrios your poetic rapturous praise leaves me in awe. Thanks my dearest friend always for the continued support and Faves....Maria xxx
Date: 10/4/2018 8:21:00 AM
Oh my goodness That was a long one One wonders how you manage to write these deep poems Martin
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Date: 10/11/2018 11:35:00 PM
A long write for you Martin. I know you love them lol....Maria hugs
Date: 10/4/2018 7:45:00 AM
Painful memories earlier in your life surface again and again, they never vanish. Brilliant follow up Maria. Tom.
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Date: 10/4/2018 7:48:00 AM
Thanks Tom. I was disappointed that a few people did not get the end of the last one, so I thought that a follow up was in order. Thank you for the visit and comments always, I truly appreciate it my friend....Maria hugs