Tears of Wax

My once passionate life,
Charming crayola broads.
Came to a halt,
When she was sent from God.

But heartbreak burned,
As I dripped to the floor.
I cried waxy tears,
Like never before.

She still crosses my mind,
Though a little bit darker.
She ran off with him,
A crayola green marker.

Now tears of red,
So frequently stream.
As the pain of my heart,
Is so easily seen.

These ardent veins,
That gushed passionate red.
Have no reason to flow,
Since my burgundy fled.

Shades of maroon outline,
This broken carmine heart.
These crimson thoughts,
Want love to embark.

But my burgundy dreams,
Will never comeback.
For all of my happiness,
Has melted to wax.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 4/17/2010 8:07:00 AM
A nice write, enjoyed. . .p.d.
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Date: 4/17/2010 2:14:00 AM
Love the wax references, Raul...perfect comparison....Congrats on your win! - Tim
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Date: 4/15/2010 6:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Linda's contest Raul. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/14/2010 10:10:00 AM
Hey Raul, Congratulations on your win in Linda's contest! Enjoy your win! ....Jimmy
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Date: 4/10/2010 4:49:00 PM
very nice take on the topic, unique, great win! Light & Love
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Date: 4/10/2010 1:53:00 PM
Wow Raul, I am surprized this one didn't come in first or close to first. The imaginative way you have taken the different colors and formed them into a metaphor of your feelings is nothing less than BRILLIANT! This one is going into my favorites. I am just now reading it as I have not been around for some time. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Aloha, Connie
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Date: 4/8/2010 7:58:00 AM
I'll never look at a broken Crayola the same. Well done and congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/7/2010 11:14:00 PM
Do you know what Raul? this is my favorite Crayon Poem..i read till now..Red,Burgundy ,Crimson and Maroon. Passionate Colors ...So deeply felt in your verses, Hope your Charming Crayola returns back to those ardent veins..I love the ending..thought its sad..all happiness melted to wax...Awesome..to my favs..Charma
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Date: 4/7/2010 6:30:00 PM
Love the title. The vivid imagery works well to convey your thoughts. Well done! Congratulations on your win in Linda-Marie's contest. Enjoy your honor. Karen
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Date: 4/7/2010 6:27:00 PM
I enjoyed this poem.
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Date: 4/7/2010 6:24:00 PM
Raul, Congratulations on your success in this competition. Agape, Moses
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Date: 4/7/2010 3:38:00 PM
This poem was one that has stayed with me long after I read it, Raul. Truly wonderful writing! Congratulations on this winner! Love, Carrie
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Date: 4/7/2010 2:54:00 PM
Raul, many congratulations on your win in Linda-Marie's fine contest, wonderful poem >> James
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Date: 4/7/2010 2:30:00 PM
Congrats Raul on your HM in my crayon contest... a stirring write and well deserved honor for u to enjoy... thankxxx for supporting my first contest...luv.. Linda-Marie
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Date: 4/7/2010 7:37:00 AM
Wow, the emotional road one travels while reading this different view of color, sad and from the deepest part of one's heart. Well done. Love, Carrie
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Date: 4/7/2010 6:34:00 AM
very nice--different, sucked me right in--like a soup opera. :)
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Date: 4/7/2010 5:17:00 AM
A colorful, emotional, metaphorical masterpiece! Sensational writing, Raul. Lainie
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