Tears

Tears
falling
on my face
in great excess
all over nonsense
because he hurt me so
breaking and destroying me
to the very core that I'm numb
that waking in the morning's a chore
a thing sometimes I don't want to happen

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/7/2010 4:47:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win in John's contest Brandee. Love, Carol

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 6/7/2010 1:59:00 AM

Congratulations Brandee on your placement in the Gauntlet Contest with this great Etheree. Good writing! Lovingly, Dane Ann

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/6/2010 7:11:00 AM

Congrats Brandee on your winning poem in John's contest with this wonderful write... enjoy the success of victory .. with luv.. Linda-Marie..

Joanna Smith

Date: 2/18/2010 1:05:00 PM

this is a very sad poem but i can't say that waking in the morning isn't a chore for me sometimes it is hard when your days are a travesty, and when you are heart broken your days are definitly a travesty! great piece! =)Jo

James Fraser

Date: 9/14/2009 12:12:00 PM

Heartfelt Etheree, a joy to read Brandee>>James

Veronica Joseph

Date: 8/20/2009 9:21:00 AM

congrats. this is very moving. terrible to feel that way!

Brian Strand

Date: 8/12/2009 12:35:00 AM

Congrats on your success in Matt's contest Brandee.Rgds Brian

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/11/2009 1:02:00 PM

Good job on this form. Congratulations on win. Joyce

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/11/2009 8:14:00 AM

Congratulations Brandee on this winning poem! Well done! ~ Carrie

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 8/11/2009 5:17:00 AM

Contratulations, for your honorable mention in the New Terrains Contest. It is a well deserved recognition. Hurray for you!!! Lovingly, Dane Smith-Johnsen

Michael Jordan

Date: 8/10/2009 11:20:00 PM

Brandee congrats on placing in the contest, mj

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 8/10/2009 10:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful win! ~Trudy~

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/10/2009 1:35:00 PM

deep so deep-well penned--charma

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 8/8/2009 5:08:00 AM

Brandee, Life can be sad sometimes... and tearful. I like your choice of poetic form for this because it's like tears falling down life's tilted plane (diagonal) of emotions. Thanks for your comments, too. Lovingly, Dane (You have soupmail)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 8/8/2009 12:59:00 AM

A very moving write--I find writing to be such a wonderful way to express one's feelings and you've done a lovely job on this one--thank you as well for you wonderful comments on my poem...enjoy your day! --nikko :)

Abe Lopez

Date: 8/3/2009 9:48:00 PM

It's good that we can recognize what hurts us so that we can avoid them..... nice write ! thanks for kind comments, abe

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/3/2009 2:49:00 PM

Nicely written. I know there must be a name for this style of an added syllable to each line. Thank you for yoru comgratulations. Love, Joyce

Kristopher S. Kern

Date: 8/3/2009 5:26:00 AM

sometimes the most important thing we need to do...IS cry....I don't mean that to sound as a cliche...but it's true..thank you for your kind words Brandee...My mother loved this poem as well...God wrote it He gets all the credit...I'm glad you enjoyed it...My Dad's been telling me for years to write a book...for the first time I'm really considering it...thanks again...Kris

Crystal Bellman

Date: 8/3/2009 3:42:00 AM

Nice write. Written full of pain. This is not a good feeling, I know too. Great job

Edward Orozco

Date: 7/29/2009 2:08:00 AM

amazing piece!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/27/2009 1:51:00 PM

find your joy. light & Love

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 7/22/2009 6:20:00 PM

This is a wonderfully done poem, I like the form also..and thank you for your comments on my featured poem also. ~Trudy~

James Knox

Date: 7/17/2009 7:58:00 PM

heartbreak is a pain im all too familiar with , this hit a nerve , good write :)

Date: 7/17/2009 12:51:00 PM

The emotion comes through your words in this poem. Interesting use of this challenging form. Keep on writing! Karen

Constance La France

Date: 7/15/2009 3:51:00 PM

aah.. its so sad and beautiful at the same time.. I also have a poem called Tears... and thank you so much for the comment on my poem Kiss Kiss... Constance

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