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Tattered Jeans and Old T-shirts

That day by the lake, tattered jeans and old t-shirts, my hand in your back pocket as we walked, your thumb hooked over the top of my waistband. It was hot, ...damned hot. You tilted your hat at a silly angle and laughed, I looked over and thought 'Hot, ...damned hot' Smiles exchanged and then a kiss, I think I melted inside. We took turns walking backwards holding both hands drinking in the sight of each other. Of course we fell, you to the floor and me... completely in love. Making a frame with my hands, a captured moment, 'smile for the camera' and what a smile it was. Sitting together in the long grass, both our hats at silly angles, you made a frame in front of us, as I kissed your cheek, and captured a memory. Images stored safely in my jeans pocket, not the one with the hole, that day by the lake... it was perfect. Only now I realise one camera never worked. The image of you, still vibrant as that day, but the one of us you made with your hands faded to barely a whisper. That day by the lake we both fell... but only one fell in love.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Date: 8/28/2010 9:08:00 PM
Sharon this is AWESOME. I came looking for you today. i haven't seen you in a while. And I recalled you told me that there was one poem of mine I had not read yet. Then I recalled its title and found it. WOW a fav for this. One of your very best in free verse. (or narrative?) LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/9/2010 9:07:00 AM
Wow Sharon,how bittersweet indeed! Such a different writing style from you -- that twist in the end just made me feel so sad -- I was smiling during the first part though-- I really enjoyed how you captured everything, so carefree and lighthearted it seems, but still with that touch of melancholy-- one which you just pull off so superbly & eloquently--- and I loved your title too!! hugs, nikko :)
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Date: 8/1/2010 4:20:00 AM
So well written, Sharon! What a pity that only one of you fell in love!! But things like that happen too often! Have a great Sunday and thank you for your kind comment on "Night Desire"...Gert:)
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Date: 7/31/2010 4:29:00 AM
Lovely story of two together spending a day out enjoy each others company. Nice twist at the end, It took me by surprise. But that's what poetry does. Have a lovely weekend Sharon >> James
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Date: 7/30/2010 10:37:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your poetry today Sharon. Wishing you a beautiful weekend filled with inspiration. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/29/2010 6:15:00 PM well written! I feel in love too with love due to such a well written poem!
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Date: 7/29/2010 5:41:00 PM
Quite sponteneous and flowing verse. A nice pen picture you have created of past memories, Sharon
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Date: 7/29/2010 1:37:00 PM
awesome poem, I loved it, ( I lived it too)
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Date: 7/29/2010 1:14:00 PM
Sad ending .. but.. a great poem..Sharon.. to share... your scenes set in poetic words come to life with imagery and vivid description.. enjoyed ..with luv..
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