Tattered

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contest tattered, tearful, threadbare, tomb words

sponsor Constance La France

Darkness abounds in my heartfelt sorrow
where she left me stripped of pride
   a battered crippled soul
who aimlessly wanders in darker realms
   of blue
I continually drown in tears of anguish
for being such a fool she used
   to fill her lonely need
and led me to this room of scattered light
where I dance with shadows in my mind
   that haunt me
my pain is captured in my swollen eyes
as I stumble through one bottle after another
   of warm whiskey
becoming an image of self-pity
   wanting to die
from this curse that came from her cold black eyes
that burned my wormy flesh
now being eaten by maggots of regret
leaving a parched skeleton
crumbling in the grave of my heart
   a vanquished soul
whose love was stolen by words believed
   from her hungry words of desire
leaving me a torn and tattered lonely drunk

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Constance La France

Date: 4/23/2024 5:24:00 AM

Frederic, congratulations on your win in my contest with this awesome poem, Constance

Chetta Achara

Date: 3/7/2024 4:42:00 PM

Your poem is so smoothly written I read in from beginning to end without even realizing. Few poems do that to me. A wonderful write on a not so wonderful subject, but many of us have been exactly where the subject of your poem finds himself.