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Tanka 2 about The Cherry Blossom and Life

on melting snow first cherry blossom withers too soon mum ties pink ribbons to the white casket Or on melting snow first cherry blossom withers too soon mum unties ribbons from empty cot-bed
Inspired by Chris`tanka contest,not for the contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 3/29/2014 7:31:00 PM
Dear Charma, Very beautiful verses, especially the first. It is so powerful. Love you, Carolyn
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Date: 3/29/2014 12:25:00 PM
Very lovely Charmaine..I like this one from you..
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Date: 3/29/2014 10:23:00 AM
This one I really like a lot, and definitely the first one is better. you should enter that first one in his contest. I think he would really like it!
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Date: 3/29/2014 1:31:00 PM
Hi dear..though Im still in learning process of tanka..I love this one better cause it reminds me of a very sad and true happening to my friend...But since its Chris'contest and He emphasised on pivot.I entered the other one..And the other reason is I might annoy him or maybe amuze him with the 'priest' concept : )
Date: 3/29/2014 9:21:00 AM
great write Charmaine,why not enter the contest
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Date: 3/29/2014 6:24:00 AM
Wow, what powerful writes my friend! You have written incredible poetry here! I surely loved reading this remarkable poem this morning! You have delighted me by the splendor of this wondrous piece! What a glorious poem, Great Work!!
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Date: 3/29/2014 2:39:00 AM
Oh shucks... this makes the heart feel so sad and heavy but yes, truly touches the heart-- I can't decide which one I prefer-- but I found it so interesting, how changing the verb can still have the same feeling that elicits, but still different. Sorry not sure if I am clear, needless to say, beautiful and moving tanka, one hopes that a parent ever experience this. Btw, I haven't been able to email you, but I keep your father-in-law in my prayers, especially for 3/26--praying for his recovery...
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Date: 3/28/2014 6:54:00 PM
Incredibly pensive, subjective, yet somehow without mis-interpretation! Very interesting Charmaine
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Date: 3/28/2014 5:44:00 PM
I like how these work with Tanka 1, you've pieced them together so well. Prefer the empty cot-bed, but still so sad.
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Date: 3/28/2014 4:46:00 PM
I Too Like Number One Here Beautiful Poet...Tis Actually A Bit Riveting Considering These Tiny Caskets; Precious Babies Like Cherubs....Again, We Find Your Beauty In Your Words So Loving, And So Soft...Making It Easy To Favour Splendours Poetic, As Also Both Your Verses....Yours Truly, Jeremy
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Date: 3/28/2014 3:07:00 PM
Tnks so much for your opinion Scribe
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Date: 3/28/2014 11:18:00 AM
The life of a flower may last for a few hours but its beauty immortal remains in the heart! Welcome back! Your Tanka will not wither though, dear Charmaine!
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Date: 3/28/2014 9:15:00 AM
Whao and ooops...what an ending?
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Date: 3/28/2014 4:26:00 AM
- Deep moving and still beautiful !!!! - I wish you a lovely weekend Charmaine. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/28/2014 1:42:00 AM
Very sad indeed. I hope your mood changes as your father-in-law improves. Take care Ron
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Date: 3/27/2014 8:06:00 PM
Wow Charmaine, this is haunting in the most exquisitely beautiful way.
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Date: 3/27/2014 6:08:00 PM
Charmaine, how did you come up with this. Oh...it is so sad, and yet....the way you have chosen your words...is so beautiful. I send you hugs
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/29/2014 1:27:00 PM
Its inspired by a friend who was pregnant at the same time I was with Christina but She lost her baby before even born...Hugs and tnks dear
Date: 3/27/2014 5:34:00 PM
Charma, this is sad but awesome at the same time. one of my favs. // paul
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