Swoosh

It’s going on three years, And I can’t forget that day. Go write your heart out, Is what you used to say. . I’m still reaching dreams, That you didn’t get to see. I’m still blessing people, Through my poetry. . My thoughts are colliding, I’m always asking why. And I‘m always asking God, When I look at the sky. . I’m left with the silence, As I sit by your grave. Thinking of how you died, Exceeding the word brave. . To face that gunman, Who held that S-K-S. It hurts to remember; You was shot in the chest. . They was looking for a hero, And you gave them that. I was looking for my friend, And God took him back. . In the blink of an eye, I lost my best friend. It’s hard facing reality, Not able to see you again. . My mind’s still spinning, My heart’s pounding fast. My whole life changed, At the sound of the blast. . All my poetic accolades, And my poetic gifts. Mean nothing to me man, Without you to share them with. . I miss how you pierced the calm, With the beat of your drum. My work's full of introspection, But my emotions are numb. . And it’s hard to go on, Without you in my life. And I long for your help, With my pain and strife. . On the edge of malfunction, With my buttons all pushed. Make the most of your lives; It can be gone in a swoosh.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 6/6/2009 1:20:00 PM
Raul...this is so sad. I am sending you a soup mail later. Patricia
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Date: 2/23/2009 5:20:00 AM
my gosh how powerfrul. I hope that you did not suffer this loss. make the most of your lives it can be gone in a swoosh, how true, great ending. I just came to p soup. you commented on me. thank you. still trying to see if this is a god place for me or not. I only posted a few poems so far. how has your time been with this venue? Catherine
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Date: 2/3/2009 2:32:00 AM
A sad poem, touching an honest..............Danielle
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Date: 2/2/2009 5:58:00 PM
Swoosh is an excellent title for this poem, your work is heart-felt..................nice work
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Date: 2/1/2009 12:12:00 AM
Wow, nice title on a great tribute. I heard a lot of great things about Drew.
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Date: 1/28/2009 4:18:00 AM
Touching Lines, I Miss Drew Too. I Can't Believe It's Almost Been Three Years. I Couldn't Imagine G-Town Without Him. He'd Be Proud OF The Way You Haven't Let Him Go. I Can Assure You Of That. It's Tough To See You Cope With His Lose, I See His Reflection In Your Life And Words. I'm Glad You Kept Going WIth Your Clothes After He Died. I See Half The State Wear What You And Him Created. It's Feels Good To See Your Clothes Out There, Everywhere I Go. I Know Who Designed It and Made It. Much Love.
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Date: 1/25/2009 1:59:00 PM
Excellent, Raul. The imagery and entire visual of this piece is breathtaking. Peace always, John
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Date: 1/23/2009 3:59:00 PM
This is a spectacular piece of poetry. Keep writing. Love Elizabeth
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Date: 1/23/2009 2:58:00 PM
From great loss comes great pain, Loss is a terrible thing to face and to carry with you till the end of time. There's a lot of emotion is this write, keep writing your heart out. DN
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Date: 1/23/2009 7:32:00 AM
Your poetry is always heartfelt Raul.Rgds Brian & thanks for yoyr welcome comments
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Date: 1/23/2009 6:11:00 AM
Raul, this is such a beautiful tribute to, I am assuming, your friend whom you have written about before. A terrible and tragic loss. This piece reflects all the emotion felt so clearly. GBY Love, Robin
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Date: 1/23/2009 5:35:00 AM
So deeply sorry for your loss Raul. Like Kristin wrote, somehow we need to believe they are nearby and know. Beautiful, emotional tribute. Love, Shar
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Date: 1/23/2009 4:47:00 AM
This is an emotional write that taps deep into my core. I can feel the pain and the voice in the poem speaks with such love and admiration for the one taken. I am in awe of this piece. Keep on doing your thing Raul. Love, Chris.
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Date: 1/23/2009 4:13:00 AM
The things that live in your heart and never leave....I'm sorry for your loss Raul. Laurie
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Date: 1/23/2009 2:42:00 AM
Oh Raul, I am so very sorry for your loss. I can really relate to the forst 2 verses, as I feel the same about my Gran. This is the one thing she knew I could do...and died before I ever beleieved in myself enough to even TRY to get published..now I am, and she is gone. We just have to believe that they know and are still with us. God bless, and keep on writing your heart out, Raul. :) P.S-please read my newest poem, I think you may relate to it. love, Kristin
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