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Swing Set Premiere Contest Winner

the sun was fixed in the sky like a fugitive in an orange jumpsuit radiating anger. the evergreen forest was shedding to carpet the steeled winter earth. pinecones and needles in a mosaic of brown and green. the swing set sat neglected chains rusted, slack like abandoned moorings. it creaked under the stress of your weight, unsure of itself. its chains, yawning after years of hibernation, start to sway, back and forth, picking up speed and confidence. In a flash you’re off the swing, gliding through thick, wet air to land on your hands and knees in the mulch. The intractable wood opens the soft flesh of your palms. The strawberry red blood glistens in the late Sunday light. A dog barks indifferently at the sun as it sheds its cumbersome bonds and falls back into the earth.

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Date: 1/16/2023 11:21:00 AM
Congratulations Corey on your trophy win. A nostalgic poem, full of imagery.
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C.W. Bryan
Date: 1/16/2023 11:27:00 AM
Thank you so much for saying so! That means a lot.
Date: 1/16/2023 11:08:00 AM
Congratulations on this great winning work. Way to go. So descriptive of childhood. Sara
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C.W. Bryan
Date: 1/16/2023 11:27:00 AM
Thank you so much, Sara! That's really kind of you to say, I appreciate it : )
Date: 1/16/2023 10:31:00 AM
Congratulations Corey! This is a brilliant verse and study in imagery and nostalgia. :)
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C.W. Bryan
Date: 1/16/2023 11:27:00 AM
Thank you so much Linda! Imagery is my favorite aspect of poetry so that means a lot. I really appreciate the comment : )
Date: 1/16/2023 10:17:00 AM
Dear Corey, your vivid poem is full of lush imagery, vibrant metaphors and melancholy beauty. A poem where age and pain and loneliness is captured and portrayed in a winter frame of cold indifference with heartfelt eloquence. Congratulations for your excellent trophy win in Brian’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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C.W. Bryan
Date: 1/16/2023 11:26:00 AM
Thank you so much! I love the phrase "melancholy beauty". I really appreciate the comment and big shout out to Brian for sponsoring!

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