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Sweet Summer Road - Visual 3

Sweet Summer Road – visual 3 Sweet summer, as emerald feelings rose, trees, gnarled by duty, waving guidon flags arched entry to the paths the lovers chose. Sweet summer, as emerald feelings rose, Love’s simple chore – make poetry from prose, hold tight the dream on rolling hills and crags Sweet summer, as emerald feelings rose, trees, gnarled by duty, waving guidon flags. 5/28/2015 submitted to – One Lovely Summer Triolet – Poetry Contest sponsor – Andrea Dietrich

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Kim Merryman

Date: 6/13/2015 8:35:00 PM

A wonderful write, John! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/13/2015 7:55:00 PM

Beautiful, John! Very nice verbal painting of that visual. Congratulations on your win! And thank you for you nice comment and congrats on my poem, "The Country Road." Sandra

Skat A

Date: 6/13/2015 6:24:00 PM

John, Congratulations on your LOVELY SUMMER TRIOLET ----- SKAT :-)

Jan Allison

Date: 6/13/2015 5:31:00 AM

wonderful imagery John many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 6/13/2015 7:20:00 AM

Thanks Jan for your continued support.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/13/2015 12:42:00 AM

John, the only one thing I could fault with this one was the fact that it was not strictly iambic; however, the tone, theme and quality of language are so incredible, it is well deserving of a top win. Such a lovely summer triolet. Congrats in my contest

John Lawless
Date: 6/13/2015 7:18:00 AM

Andrea, another great contest(and I hate writing Triolet - but enjoy torturing the muse). Thanks for the high placement in spite of the flaws. To paraphrase a great movie line "Thank you Ma'am may we have another!"

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 5/29/2015 9:05:00 AM

Incredible imagery, John! I love the sentiments of summer love and adventure...Thanks for the visit today (I hate camping, but I love a beautiful sunset). Hugs, Rhonda

John Lawless
Date: 5/29/2015 9:24:00 AM

Appreciate your stopping by to comment, keep writing.

Constance La France

Date: 5/29/2015 8:15:00 AM

John, this is outstanding. So beautiful and a awesome 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, let me tell you a story

John Lawless
Date: 5/29/2015 9:23:00 AM

My pleasure, I try to drop in on as many poets as possible and squeeze in a few new ones each day but time....life's predatory stalker...haunts my efforts.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/29/2015 3:56:00 AM

tremendous imagery leading to a languid mood... a beauty! huggs

John Lawless
Date: 5/29/2015 7:08:00 AM

OH, Nette, "a languid mood"....if only I had been able to weave that into the poem. Thanks for stopping to read and comment.

Skat A

Date: 5/28/2015 10:18:00 PM

She will love this

John Lawless
Date: 5/29/2015 7:06:00 AM

Yeah SKAT, she's a cruel woman - but fair.

Casarah Nance

Date: 5/28/2015 6:55:00 PM

Oh I really like that line-loves simple chore-make poetry from prose...you have a wonderfully imagery here, painting perfectly, well done :)

John Lawless
Date: 5/29/2015 7:05:00 AM

Casarah, always appreciate your support and input. Triolets torment me but Andrea dangles the bait so temptingly.....

The Grahamburglar

Date: 5/28/2015 6:17:00 PM

Awesome write, John. This will be a winner for sure! Great job and easy 7 from me.

The Grahamburglar
Date: 5/28/2015 6:31:00 PM

I just wrote my first one yesterday, and it was certainly a challenge. Yours is executed much more gracefully. I admire your talent.

John Lawless
Date: 5/28/2015 6:26:00 PM

Thanks Preston, I always struggle with the little triolet troublemakers.