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Sweet Spring

Days are lengthening with spring. Winter's thaw has awaken the earth. The rebirth cycle begins in my backyard. Bird feeders are full. Goldfinches adorned in their brighter yellow feathers of spring, happily feeding on seed. House wrens are making new nests and chirping their mating songs, creating a wonderful soundscape to my ears. A gentle south breeze flows. With ice and snow melted, rivers flow. Transitioning winter to spring, and greening-up Mother's Earth. Buds are bursting forth on most of my trees with little green leaves. My purple crocus and blue hyacinth have started too bloom, much too early here in the north. What's in the air that makes me feel better? I like to think it's the sweet days of spring. northern wind shivers wrapping warmth with woolen shawl early spring sleeps lite A Haibun with a Haiku For Debbie Guzzi's contest,"Spring Haibun"

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Date: 3/7/2013 6:23:00 PM
congrats on a fine win Connie
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 3/8/2013 6:32:00 AM
Thank you for your congrats. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 3/7/2013 4:04:00 PM
!!! ((())) Congrats on your great win..Sara
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 3/8/2013 6:32:00 AM
Thank you Sara for your congrats. Much appreciated. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 3/6/2013 8:05:00 PM
This is a beauty, Connie! Congratulations on a fine win! Just love your your Haiku! Love, Annalise
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 3/7/2013 2:39:00 AM
Thank you Anna for your lovely comment. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 3/6/2013 5:47:00 PM
This is a beauty, Connie!! And the last line of your haiku........oh wow...I love the way you said it!!
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 3/7/2013 2:40:00 AM
Thank you Carrie for your lovely comment. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 3/6/2013 1:41:00 PM
Personally, I like the structure of 5-7-5 in a haiku... and so saying, I love this one. I like the idea of a woolen shawl !! Enjoyed and congrats on your win !!
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 3/6/2013 2:29:00 PM
Thank you Debra for your lovely comment. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 3/5/2013 9:42:00 PM
Connie, ;-) Congratulations with your nice winning poem in Debbie's "Spring haibun" contest... xox~LINDA
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 3/6/2013 2:30:00 PM
Linda thank you for the congrats. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 3/5/2013 7:14:00 PM
Thanks for the entry! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 3/6/2013 2:31:00 PM
Thank you for the placement of HM. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 2/9/2013 11:36:00 AM
awesome, I see you fixed it! I hope you are feeling well today, sweetie.
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/9/2013 3:06:00 PM
I'm not sure if the haiku is correct but it's the best I can do. I'm thinking of taking a haiku and a meter poetry course online so to improve my knowledge and writing skills. Not sure what the best course to take but will check them out I'm doing okay.Thanks for stopping by. Warm Smiles Connie
Date: 2/8/2013 2:33:00 PM
Reminded me of an Alfred Hitchcock movie.
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/8/2013 2:50:00 PM
Your right John. I was thinking on deleting a couple bird line in the poem for that very reason. Thank you, I just rewrote it. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 2/8/2013 5:26:00 AM
wonderful write Connie,best of luck in the contest
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/8/2013 10:01:00 AM
Thank you Richard for stopping by and for your comment. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 2/8/2013 4:30:00 AM
wonderful poetry Connie,, such visual aspects here, love this
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/8/2013 4:58:00 AM
Thank you Harry. Still learning poetic styles of writing. Never too sure what I'm doing. Six months of writing poetry, I'm green. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 2/7/2013 6:58:00 PM
LOvely Prose!!! You have 3 separate sentences in your haiku attempt ..note the 3 verbs? That's probably why you felt like capitalizing ;). a haiku has only 2 parts and is not a complete thought it is a momentary glimpse supported by other senses of an evoked feeling. Please check this out, let me know when to recheck the haiku part.https://sites.google.com/site/graceguts/essays/haiku-checklist HUGS>> Light & Love
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/8/2013 4:52:00 AM
Debbie all fixed, I hope. I've only been writing poems for six months. Always learning each time I write. Thank you for your advice. Much appreciated. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 2/7/2013 6:36:00 PM
Beautiful one, Connie. Debs does not like haiku capitalized, so I hope you put all the letters small in the haiku, ok? I love the imagery of the animals awakening to spring.
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/8/2013 4:56:00 AM
Thanks Andrea. I've only been writing poems for six months. With each write I learn. Thanks for your advice. I fixed it, I hope. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 2/7/2013 3:11:00 PM
Winning material for sure in my book..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Thanks for stopping by my work..Sara
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/7/2013 4:29:00 PM
Thanks for your comment Sara and for stopping by. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 2/7/2013 11:38:00 AM
This is a beautifully crafted write my friend! You have brought forth some wonderful birds and the transition from Winter to Spring, gorgeous poem Connie! Your Haiku fits the prose quite perfectly, this is a nice Haibun, written masterfully! You should do well in the contest! What a fantastic piece, Great Work!!
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/7/2013 4:27:00 PM
Thank you Russell for your wonderful comment. Appreciate very much. Warm Smiles, Connie
Date: 2/7/2013 9:25:00 AM
Feels like a walk in the park....thanks.
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/7/2013 9:45:00 AM
A big congrats to you on your confessions of a poet contest. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Connie Gildersleeve
Date: 2/7/2013 9:39:00 AM
Thanks Donna for stopping by and for your comment. When everything is in bloom it is. Warm Smiles, Connie

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