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Surrender

God weeps a salt lake of tears ~ Sweet breaths of a goddess sigh in my ear A New Crystalline - Any Theme Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Tania Kitchin Howmanysyllables (17) 02/28/23

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/14/2023 3:44:00 AM

Am I seeing wicked written in this one or I am confusing it with my wrong thoughts. Congratulations on this winner. Way to go. Good to see it on the winners' list. Sara

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/14/2023 4:20:00 AM

Thank you Sara, you know I have a dark sense of humour, and in this case it’s probably forbidden passion the god and goddess are merely metaphors, thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David

Tania Kitchin

Date: 3/13/2023 4:10:00 PM

David, congratulations on your winning placement with your creative crystalline!

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/13/2023 4:44:00 PM

I’m really delighted to have made the cut in your contest Tania, was my first crystalline so all the sweeter, cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/13/2023 5:44:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win :) -

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/13/2023 11:54:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise, I’m always delighted with a placement, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/4/2023 10:23:00 PM

Wow this is so cool!

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/5/2023 2:42:00 AM

Music to my ear!

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 3/1/2023 2:31:00 AM

Imagery and emotion. Good luck with the contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/1/2023 3:49:00 AM

Thanks Victor, I’ll probably need some luck to score with this one lol, cheers David

Joanna Daniel

Date: 2/28/2023 10:07:00 PM

Very interesting one, David:)

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/1/2023 12:38:00 AM

Man overcome by seduction and lust Jo, nothing religious apart from the choice of language, thanks so much for the visit, cheers David

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/28/2023 2:11:00 PM

The more of these I read, the more I understand. Yours has an obvious turn. I'm no expert on the form but I like this one, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/28/2023 2:48:00 PM

Thanks Daniel, I’m certainly no expert on this form either, but I take it literally as a crystalline Monoku, but seen from different perspective, with the all important turn, cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/28/2023 12:32:00 PM

- Great written with emotion, David - GL in the contest :) - hugs

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/28/2023 1:07:00 PM

Heya Anne-Lise, emotion of a certain kind, that perhaps is uncontrollable, cheers David