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written for an ai generated picture prompt... not sure if i got this form right but just trying something new. 
 

superficial silence

why do we 
still assume that whispered diamond dialects
delicate and sheer
aren't scripted with blades 
that curdle blood-stained musings
as summer symphonies scorch ebony skin
tattooed with dark and deep sinister sonnets
sewn from superficial scarlet syllables 
that emanate rusted mahogany hues

so listen to the mulberry metaphors
that rain with roseate rhymes 
from the hazy melancholic midnight skies
where not every mist of dust 
becomes a halcyon teal blue rivulet 
of passionate poetry
nor do they mirror 
the wind 
carrying unspoken tale
that is veiled
beneath twinkling twilight tides
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Kendrick Avatar
December 7, 2023 at 6:36 AM
Way to go with this creative winner in Suzette's contest. Congratulations to you. Sara K
Richards Avatar
December 6, 2023 at 3:50 AM
Congratulations on your placement, Ink. If you would like to have a copy of the tables as mentioned on the contest page, please soup mail me your e-mail address. Regards, Suzette
Empress Avatar
December 6, 2023 at 4:56 AM
Thank you so much, Suzette, grateful for the placement and for the experience
George Avatar
November 28, 2023 at 8:20 PM
Every line and every phrase, something unique ! Love the usages...."rusted mahogany hues": "halcyon teal blue rivulet of passionate poetry". Wordsmith, I am in love with your poetry. Excellent !
One Avatar
November 25, 2023 at 5:43 AM
Are you listening to mulberry metaphors? You always have a unique way with words and I used roseate in my poem today.... oh that halcyon teal blue rivulet of passionate poetry.. always the best poetry in so many ways.. hope you can see beyond those twinkling twilight tides... great poem dear.
Williams Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 9:02 PM
You are mastering so many forms of poetry, dearest Inky, my mind boggles. As always brilliantly written, full of so many beautiful lines, its hard to choose, however, the last three lines really resonated with me. Hugs
Kendrick Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 9:10 AM
Yes, we never know what is in the heart of the poet unless they are willing to let us know. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara K
Baker Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 8:49 AM
An intriguing poem that emphasizes the importance of reality verses the futility of the insignificant prattle around us. I'm not familiar with this form, but I like what you've accomplish through it, my friend. A FAV for my list! May Light make your path clear and dear to your heart. Bill
Buhagiar Avatar
November 20, 2023 at 1:50 AM
Brilliant poem. Great reading that greets the heart, Blessings.
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:29 AM
Thank you so very much always. Blessings
Rolland Avatar
November 19, 2023 at 6:00 PM
beautifuly written, IE, very far from being artuficial, enjoyed both subtle images and sonorities, awesome poem , bravo mon ami
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:29 AM
Thank you so very much. Do we say merci? Ah. So grateful for your support always
May Avatar
November 19, 2023 at 12:20 AM
Wonderful write Empress. Best wishes in the contest
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:28 AM
Thank you so very much joseph always for your kind support
Hind Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 4:04 PM
This is beautiful, and you know what I find- you always have a wisdom to write! A pleasure!
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:28 AM
Awwn thank you kind soul for your sincere comments and for checking up on me, i hope thanksgiving is going well for you? Sending you lots of light today and always
Hind Avatar
November 19, 2023 at 6:10 PM
I don't think you'll celebrate it actually, you're in Maldives I forget, lol. I just wanted you to smile. :)
Hind Avatar
November 19, 2023 at 6:04 PM
added remarks to check up on you and make sure you're okay...hope your going to enjoy the holidays. I am making plans, not sure if they'll work out, lol. Please take care, your friend, just me!
Pandit Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 1:13 PM
Kudos my friend for trying out so many different forms. I tried to read the rules of the contest so I could write informed comments on your poem--but I gave up--too complex for my comprehension--and not worth the trouble. Nice blend of imagery woven with emotion and poetic devices, as always, Ink.
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:26 AM
Aahh thats so kind of you to do that and thank you so very much for your generous support truly always grateful for your poetic presence
Greenhough Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 9:12 AM
I enjoyed this very intellectual poem. Life in the real is so much better than superficial existence. Thank you for this poem.
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:25 AM
Ah thank you so very much for your kindness and support truly grateful always
Poet Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 8:41 AM
This is an intriguing verse, adorned with an exceptional climax "beneath twinkling twilight tides", brilliantly sewn with painstakingly selected language that effortlessly coalesces, prompting wonder and displaying absolute grandeur. Your poem is expertly woven, if it's for a contest that's a sure winner. BOL
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:25 AM
Thank you so much sotto for your feedback and well wishes im always grateful for your kind support
Onpaper Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 8:19 AM
diamond dialects delicate… summer symphonies scorch ebony skin tattooed with dark and deep sinister sonnets.. oooo alliterations!!! listen to the mulberry metaphors that rain with roseate rhymes.. oh yess I listen aee papi!! they mirror the wind carrying unspoken tale.. ooo love that line .. crafted in such perfection!! The way you have used the words from heaven to describe such graceful elements, the skies ,the nights , the tides,..craftsmanship at its absolute finest aee papi!!
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:24 AM
Ah papi u always understand my metaphors not many would get sometimes what im sayng but we speak the same language so grateful
Culverhouse Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 7:38 AM
It's like you knit or crochet with words, such incredibly well chosen words that you put together with ease, or so you make it seem, utterly impressive and quite brilliant
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:24 AM
Ah thank you so much truly for your kind and encouraging feedback. Truly grateful for your support always
Rhymes Avatar
November 18, 2023 at 7:18 AM
Unspoken tails reminded me of so many things . Beautiful .
Empress Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 2:23 AM
Ah thank you so much tales you mean haha
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