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Sun's First Kiss

The breeze glides on scent
Sweet fresh breath of dawn's moist dew
Sun's first kiss of day



Haiku
5/31/2011
Brenda Atry

naturehaiku

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Ana Espinola Collins

July 14, 2014 at 8:43 PM

Wonderful Haiku...:) Ana

Judith Angell Meyer

July 13, 2014 at 6:40 PM

Very nice haiku.

Debbie Guzzi

October 24, 2012 at 10:34 AM

Where oh where are you? Light & Love

Brenda Victoria Northeast

April 29, 2012 at 6:15 AM

Whether it be truly haiku or not I loved it Brenda - thank you for sharing your sweet wisp of morning breath and suns kisses, love, light and joy, Brenda : )

Debbie Guzzi

June 14, 2011 at 1:07 PM

Hi Brenda haiku does not use any poetic vehicles no personification, metaphor or simile [occasionally a wee bit of alliteration] this was the hardest thing for me to get over. Just keep thinking a snap shot discription [with no judgement made by the poet] written short/long/short with a CUT which brings in a sensory feeling...& a seasonal word [there are long lists of words which call to mind seasons ex: lambs would bring to mind spring/ no need to always say Spring] Light & Love

Brenda Atry

June 14, 2011 at 1:15 PM

brain in round bone case Atop a spine with s curve hollow filled with dust I'm at a low low low...Thanks for the comment..I need some love and light Bren