Sun's First Kiss

The breeze glides on scent Sweet fresh breath of dawn's moist dew Sun's first kiss of day Haiku 5/31/2011 Brenda Atry

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Ana Espinola Collins

Date: 7/14/2014 8:43:00 PM

Wonderful Haiku...:) Ana

Judith Angell Meyer

Date: 7/13/2014 6:40:00 PM

Very nice haiku.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/24/2012 10:34:00 AM

Where oh where are you? Light & Love

Brenda Victoria Northeast

Date: 4/29/2012 6:15:00 AM

Whether it be truly haiku or not I loved it Brenda - thank you for sharing your sweet wisp of morning breath and suns kisses, love, light and joy, Brenda : )

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/14/2011 1:07:00 PM

Hi Brenda haiku does not use any poetic vehicles no personification, metaphor or simile [occasionally a wee bit of alliteration] this was the hardest thing for me to get over. Just keep thinking a snap shot discription [with no judgement made by the poet] written short/long/short with a CUT which brings in a sensory feeling...& a seasonal word [there are long lists of words which call to mind seasons ex: lambs would bring to mind spring/ no need to always say Spring] Light & Love

Brenda Atry
Date: 6/14/2011 1:15:00 PM

brain in round bone case Atop a spine with s curve hollow filled with dust I'm at a low low low...Thanks for the comment..I need some love and light Bren

Ashley Plotczyk

Date: 6/1/2011 2:19:00 PM

Creative! Love your haiku