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Sun Split Haiku

early morning sun
a brand new day is dawning
hear
the cockerel crow

sun beams from heaven 
with uplifting mellowness 
they 
brighten up our world 

scorching hot sunshine
summer has arrived at last
eat
cooling ice cream cones

beautiful sunset
spectacular orange sky
soon
darkness will descend

(N contest  rule 5 7 5 haiku with one additional word)

Contest Split Haiku Sponsored by Mystic Rose
04~03~16

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Poet Destroyer A Date: 4/6/2016 9:50:00 PM Jan, Congratulations on your "MYSTICS SPLIT HAIKU win." ~LINDA~ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/6/2016 9:53:00 PM Thanks so much Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane Date: 4/6/2016 3:17:00 PM I feel as though I spent a bright sunny day with you and now it's dusk. Well done and congrats, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/6/2016 3:46:00 PM Many thanks Lin that was what I what trying to portray sunrise to sunset:-) hugs jan xx

Dineen Williams Gault Date: 4/6/2016 7:37:00 AM Your imagery is stunning, beautifully painted haiku! Congratulations! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/6/2016 7:38:00 AM Thanks so much Dineen:-) hugs Jan xx

Balveen Cheema Date: 4/6/2016 5:41:00 AM Jan, your haikus are superb! Congrats! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/6/2016 5:48:00 AM aww thanks Balveen I just try my best and hope people like it:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 4/6/2016 2:10:00 AM Congrats on a worthy win with these superb haikus Jan.. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/6/2016 4:52:00 AM Many thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 4/5/2016 5:37:00 PM Back to congratulate you on your win. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/5/2016 5:38:00 PM Many thanks Eve I was delighted to place:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/5/2016 5:32:00 PM I'm so glad this got on the list. WEll deserved win, my friend. You and I were on the same wave length here. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/5/2016 5:35:00 PM Thanks Andrea I was absolutely delighted to place in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 4/5/2016 5:07:00 PM Wonderful imagery, Jan. Congratulations on your fine win! Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/5/2016 5:08:00 PM Thanks so much Sandra I am just reading the winning poems and they are delightful:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars Date: 4/5/2016 5:01:00 PM Jan a wonderful split haiku! congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/5/2016 5:02:00 PM Thanks LuLoo I am delighted the poem will get more widely read:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven Date: 4/4/2016 7:12:00 PM Hi Jan, well i felt i needed a Haiku this morning so hear i am. I wanted to stop by your work so i thought i would look for one, i didn't have to look too hard and what a wonder my eyes behold. This is a brilliant Haiku Jan. From start to finish it holds together strongly. The words sing into my mind and the imagery that comes from them is so beautiful. I am not going to put the kiss of death on this excellent write by saying how i think it will do in the contest. A 7 and Fave. Hugs....Mike. XX Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/5/2016 2:02:00 AM Thanks as ever for your support Mike - I enter contests to expand my creativity - the most important thing to me is my poems get read - a win is a great way to give your poem more exposure:-) hugs Jan xx

Manmath Dalei Date: 4/4/2016 9:33:00 AM Nice haiku Jan....... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/4/2016 9:38:00 AM Thanks Manmath:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May Date: 4/3/2016 9:48:00 PM Beautiful write Jan...good luck in the contest Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 11:41:00 PM Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 4/3/2016 4:32:00 PM Hi Jan...I don't know much about this form, but whatever it is you offer some delightful images. gl in the contest. hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 4:40:00 PM Many thanks Paul - it is my first attempt at this form - it's a 5 7 5 haiku with an additional 1 syllable word splitting it up:-) I do appreciate your support:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/3/2016 2:45:00 PM - Beautiful, Jan !! - Good luck in the contest ! - hugs // Anne-Lis :) #7 Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 2:46:00 PM Thanks so much Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/3/2016 12:48:00 PM You did sunshine splendidly, Jan!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 12:50:00 PM aww thanks Andrea I hope Vienna likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Barry Stebbings Date: 4/3/2016 9:54:00 AM Beautiful, Jan, I can feel the warmth, Barry Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 10:36:00 AM

Constance La France Date: 4/3/2016 12:44:00 AM Jan, oh these are lovely, they all flow together so nicely to read like one poem, excellent and I am loving this 7( and btw it will be -12 in my part of Canada tomorrow, so I am quite jealous) ~ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 6:56:00 AM I struggle to write one haiku style poem so I am pleased with the flow I managed to create - we have rain here but hopefully brighter warmer days are ahead:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 4/2/2016 11:06:00 PM Lovely imagery that didn't even need any pictures Jan! #7. ; ) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 6:55:00 AM Thanks so much Connie - it took a while to write I did the original poem about a week ago and my muse took a holiday - but she came back just in time for me to enter the contest lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 4/2/2016 9:38:00 PM wonderful write, Jan, I too love icecream :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 6:54:00 AM Thanks Eve - I love ice cream but now hubby is probably diabetic it will be a rare treat in our household:-( hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith Date: 4/2/2016 8:50:00 PM I like ice cream. I like your poems too... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/3/2016 6:53:00 AM Aww thanks Charlie:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/2/2016 6:54:00 PM very very very beautiful! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 4/2/2016 6:55:00 PM aww thanks ... and I guess the poems aren't bad either lol:-) hugs jan xx