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Summersend (Combined Haiku and Tanka)

summersend
population - 90 days
blink your eyes and you're through it

         Leaves

something in the wind
that whispered play of old green
then this sudden chill
with arms about my shoulders
sadly thinking    summersend

how they toss about
then calm as thoughtful children
clinging    clinging    summersend

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/22/2011 11:27:00 PM

oh, and definite 7 (top rating) for this one.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/22/2011 11:26:00 PM

wow, I (on the other hand) got lucky tonight and came RIGHT to one that was new for me!! I love these, and especially the haiku!! awesome, daver. Oh, my you are so funny asking me what Hotmail is. It's my email address. I haven't heard from you in my hotmail account for a long time. I hope you still have me on your email list? Let me know if you don't. I have sent you some forwards lately but got no reply from you . Luv, Andrea

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 3/21/2010 6:08:00 AM

Your poems, as this one, and even your comments always tend to inspire me, Daver. You is just awesome my friend! Sure am glad you're in the soup with the rest of us. -Robert

Donna Golden

Date: 9/18/2009 12:00:00 PM

Another sweet write, Daver. The children do, indeed, cling to "summersend". I wrote a poem long ago called, "Summer's End". It's way back in my first postings if you'd like to take a look. Hugs, Donna

Date: 9/5/2009 1:46:00 PM

Soup mail for you too! Karen

Date: 9/5/2009 9:15:00 AM

Wow! I like how you combined these two forms. So creative. Nice use of imagery. Keep on writing. Have a wonderful weekend. Karen

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 9/3/2009 12:29:00 PM

this is a great combination of forms and play on words and imagery! You write so well Daver! Thank you for commenting on my featured poem also. ~Trudy~

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/28/2009 3:06:00 PM

Love it. Love the play on words and thoughts. Keep writing. Sara

James Marshall Goff

Date: 8/27/2009 7:22:00 PM

such gentle sweet poems from our virtuoso! jimbo

Donna Golden

Date: 8/27/2009 10:53:00 AM

Nice work, Daver...you have described the mood of the waning season. Regarding "What Offense", thanks for your comments. I work in education, too, and have encountered children who live the unthinkable every day. Heartbreaking. I am so blessed to be able to love these kids and show them that they have value. Blessings to you today! Donna kajr

John Loving Iii

Date: 8/26/2009 6:03:00 PM

still a little left. nice piece. john

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 8/26/2009 1:39:00 PM

You have such a talent..this is truly an awesome piece. BG

Date: 8/25/2009 5:29:00 PM

Good use of imagery and alliteration for a creative view. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Karen

James Fraser

Date: 8/25/2009 2:56:00 PM

Picture perfect as i close my eyes, holidays over - children cry. Summers gone for another year, don't worry kids it will reappear. Excellent write Daver>>James

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/25/2009 12:46:00 PM

What a brilliant compilation of the tanka and haiku forms, Daver. All children dread the coming of fall and the end of their extended period of play at "summersend." Excellent write, dear friend! Love, Carolyn (Leaving for Jersey in 45 minutes, but had to see if anything new had been posted by my favorite poets.) Love you, Carolyn