Sugar Lou

Quiet winds this summer morn The peaceful trees to bid good day A black tea cup foretold the tale When Sugar Lou arrived – to stay Our Sugar Lou, a winsome girl Diminutive at five foot three Had been away for twenty years She’d lost her mind to some degree She loved the lustrous sheen of knives Her eyes reflected green in glare She did not know, they said that day That blood yet glistened in her hair Now jealousy torments us all And even though she wore his ring She stabbed him time and time again Caught with another on the swing She’s better now, the doctors say She’s come to rest here by the lake We’ll sip our tea, we’ll reminisce But just don’t let her cut the cake!

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Heidi Sands

Date: 7/7/2018 2:23:00 PM

You have written a story that shows what can happen to people when they lose control. Well done Mike. Happy Saturday :)

Mike Gentile
Date: 7/7/2018 2:35:00 PM

Thanks so much Heidi, Happy Saturday to you xxoo

Agnes Krampe

Date: 7/1/2018 4:41:00 PM

Good storytelling, Mike.

Mike Gentile
Date: 7/1/2018 4:51:00 PM

Thank you Agnes!!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/1/2018 2:46:00 PM

Mike, A chilling tale that I enjoyed with my morning tea! It is so sad when someone you love has mental problems and snaps. You managed to create a clear picture with just a few stanzas. Bravo! : )

Mike Gentile
Date: 7/1/2018 4:52:00 PM

Thanks Connie, I really appreciate your kind words xxoo

Yazmin Malik

Date: 6/28/2018 3:48:00 PM

Jealousy is a sign of love, but can be lethal if not controlled! Damn!

Mike Gentile
Date: 6/28/2018 3:50:00 PM

You are so right, Yazmin xxoo

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 6/28/2018 11:13:00 AM

Sugar Lou is a wonderful poem. I know such cases of mental aberrations. You have most creatively depicted a case with your poetic genius.An extra-ordinary exercise.No. 1 to me. Regards Mike. > Rajat.

Mike Gentile
Date: 6/28/2018 11:21:00 AM

Thank you so very much for your kind words, Rajat!!!!

Warren Doll

Date: 6/28/2018 8:31:00 AM

"But just don't let her cut the cake" wonderful line and dark poem. Mike

Mike Gentile
Date: 6/28/2018 9:35:00 AM

Thanks Warren, Happy Thursday!!!

Lyric Man

Date: 6/28/2018 5:50:00 AM

Mike.. I enjoyed reading your work this morning. Always nice to check out creative lines with a cup of coffee!

Mike Gentile
Date: 6/28/2018 5:56:00 AM

Thanks Lyric Man, I agree and certainly appreciate your comments, Happy Thursday!!!

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 6/27/2018 8:35:00 PM

Hello Mike, yes I would say that she was very jealous. It is not good to be that way. She should have left him alone instead. Have a nice evening my friend.xxx-ooo.

Mike Gentile
Date: 6/27/2018 9:15:00 PM

You too Darlene, Thanks xxoo

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/27/2018 7:51:00 PM

Hell hath no fury comes to mind mind, I'll pass on the cake thanks. Tom

Mike Gentile
Date: 6/27/2018 9:14:00 PM

Right Tom! Me too

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/27/2018 4:57:00 PM

A sad story..I guess some do resort to violence when feeling cheated..perhaps she has lost control..keep that knife away.

Mike Gentile
Date: 6/27/2018 5:09:00 PM

You got it Vijay, thanks!!!!