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Poem written for and submitted to “A Secret Kept” poetry contest, John Lawless, sponsor, November 11, 2025. 

Premiere Contest WinnerSUFFOCATION-A Secret Kept Poetry Contest

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Cedar fragrance floats softly in the air like old ghosts awakening after sleep. Inside, yellowed envelopes carry the silent burden of hands that never delivered their confessions. A brittle map traces borders that dissolved with the century's breath. In the probing moonlight, tarnished brass hinges moan. Beneath folded sweaters, apologies fossilize, and grief settles like dust on unworn wedding lace. A sapphire brooch recalls the heartbeat under a collarbone where it pinned courage tight until surrendering. Trapped light holds what daylight wouldn't understand. Within attic walls the lid groans echoing how memory bends under its own weight. Secrets don't suffocate here~ they become the wood's grain.
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Pasovic Avatar
December 20, 2025 at 12:17 PM
Good Job Finally someone with some style. Thank you and keep writing. Don't get off the track! All the best!
Miller Avatar
December 17, 2025 at 7:26 AM
What a wonderful poem a well-deserved podium place, congratulations
Peck Avatar
December 10, 2025 at 9:38 AM
This is beautiful, Sara. The thought of an uncompleted love's faded lace gown found folded in a wooden trunk for years is so sad. Congratulations on your big win!
Poet Avatar
December 8, 2025 at 1:47 AM
Heartfelt congratulations on your podium win, dear Sara. What a great honor to share the podium with you.
George Avatar
December 7, 2025 at 7:57 PM
"the lid groans echoing how memory bends under its own weight." This is a deep write about a secret kept undisclosed in yellow covers within a cedar box. Apart from some hints, the readers do not get a clear idea of the secret locked within. Hearty Congratulations on your top win, dear Sara.
Jones Avatar
December 7, 2025 at 2:34 PM
Wow your imagination knows no limits! Great writing Sara and congratulations on your win!
Lawless Avatar
December 7, 2025 at 12:02 PM
Sara, the cedar fragrance drew me into the dusty corners of this. "...the lid groans echoing how memory bends under it own weight", beautifully done, Thanks for participating in the "contest"
Hind Avatar
November 11, 2025 at 7:31 PM
This is like seeing through a mist but not seeing the solid outline, it's its own truth, Sara. Beautiful.
Etgen-Baker Avatar
November 12, 2025 at 5:55 PM
wow, your comments gave me pause...thank you! hugs, Sara
Maverick Avatar
November 11, 2025 at 12:00 PM
Very cryptic themed, methapors insnuate.' A sense of quality pervades This write Sara.'
Etgen-Baker Avatar
November 11, 2025 at 3:50 PM
wow, Joe, thanks for those encouraging words. Grateful
Gauthier Avatar
November 11, 2025 at 8:40 AM
Beautifully crafted imagery, Sara ~ congrats
Etgen-Baker Avatar
November 11, 2025 at 3:49 PM
thank you, Line, for your complimentary words.
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