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Suddenly Swans

Our Tall Duckling (original title) Our daughter, always through her childhood, at least a head above any other girl in her class, stands somewhere offstage now with long lashes darkened by mascara and with lips and cheeks painted pink. She waits with other nervous pre-teens in her group where I left them - acting silly and softly giggling as many twelve-year-old girls grouped together are wont to do. Adorable kindergarten-age girls are now on the stage, tap-dancing out of sync to the tune of  “Stray Cat Strut.” As their music fades, they prance away, stage-left. Our Angela, strikingly tall in her white sparkling tutu and angelic as her name implies, sets foot on the stage as if leading the flock of other lovely daughters of other proud parents. We collectively hold our breath -  cameras ready - as all the young girls converge in the center of the stage, on ballerina tip-toes  and with graceful, fluttering arms, suddenly swans! April 12, 2019 Inspired by Maureen McGreavy's Suddenly Swans Contest

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Date: 4/28/2019 9:52:00 PM
I love this entry Andrea. I'm so happy it made her list. Congratulations! : )
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Date: 4/28/2019 8:32:00 AM
This is so engaging, an absolute delight. Congratulations for your win, and thank you Andrea, xomo!
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Date: 4/25/2019 7:57:00 PM
Creative take on the contest. Beautiful!
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Date: 4/13/2019 2:12:00 PM
I danced with SF ballet, taught 16 classes a week, performed, and staged ballets. I did this for 12 years after my position of Director of Research (I always go back-and-forth between Science and Arts). What I loved best about this is the continuum you showed us with ballerina babies to young more trained swans. I love that you compared her own growth with becoming a swan. Nicely done.
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Date: 4/13/2019 1:45:00 PM
My sister was in Ballet for years. It wasn't pretty. Isn't it great to be a parent. The best thing I ever did. Have a great day.
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Date: 4/12/2019 4:42:00 PM
Oh Andrea...this brought tears. You capture that sweet innocence so beautifully and the bursting bossom of the proud parent's joy! I loved this piece! Into my Faves! See you at the top of the list! xxoo
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/12/2019 6:54:00 PM
wow, thanks so much, Connie.
Date: 4/12/2019 12:10:00 PM
This 'felt' true to me, a Mother's true reaction to her daughter's stage presence, to her growing up. I hope Angela has a copy of this poem! I can only come up with obvious ideas for this contest; the ugly duckling / swan thing. I truly enjoyed reading this, Andrea. Love ... CayCay
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/12/2019 6:54:00 PM
yes, when I saw the theme, it took me to the ballet swan lake. And though my daughter never performed as a swan, you know me and poetic license, and yes, my "Own" title is inspired by the ugly duckling story!! thanks, my sweet friend. Tried to call you the other day! One more day after this and I'll wake up to my trip!
Date: 4/12/2019 11:43:00 AM
One minute a child the next a young woman, they grow up so fast Andrea, I remember my three suddenly losing their childhood. Well written. Tom.
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