Richard Lamoureux Poet Quatrain

Subtraction Man

He used to be three dimensional
and then he became two
I know it seems far fetched 
But I’m telling you it’s true

In two dimensions
he could still depict three
If people didn’t look to closely
They’d believe what they’d see

His paper thin personality 
once colourful and cool
Gradually became faded
no longer able to fool

Winds of change kept blowing
Two dimensions turned into one
Without any depth there
one was destined to be none

Not a soul remembers him
He simply faded away
A whisper from yesterday
Who had nothing real to say

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Eric Cohen July 10, 2020 at 12:29 PM Reading this one again "for the first time." This is great. -- Eric Richard Lamoureux July 10, 2020 at 3:04 PM Thanks Eric.:0)

Timothy Hicks May 9, 2020 at 1:16 AM This is really neat, Rick. Turning geometry into an allegory of the man who gradually lost his personality (or I guess 'depth' would be more accurate). I think I'll add this to my favorites because I appreciate the creativity of the piece. Richard Lamoureux May 9, 2020 at 8:04 AM Much appreciated Timothy.

Vladislav Raven March 22, 2020 at 9:18 AM Hi Richard, this excellent piece does ring so true. Sometimes, some of us feel like this well before the end. Your creativity is shining, my friend. We all wish to be more than a whisper, when comes the end. Another excellent write from your golden pen, Richard. This piece flows so well from the beginning to the end. Has to be a fav, Have a wonderful Sunday, stay blessed....Mike. Richard Lamoureux March 22, 2020 at 11:11 AM Thanks for all your visits this morning Mike. Blessings to you as well.

Paul Callus March 12, 2020 at 11:02 AM This is cool, Richard. Somehow reminds me of the painter who kept diluting his paint till finally all his work faded and came to nought. ~ Regards // paul Richard Lamoureux March 12, 2020 at 11:05 AM I always thought I was deluding myself when in fact I may have been diluting myself instead, *lol*

Robert Kinard March 8, 2020 at 8:13 AM Nicely done my friend, you make wish I wrote it. Richard Lamoureux March 8, 2020 at 9:07 AM Thanks Robert. ;0)

Cecilia Macfarlane March 6, 2020 at 11:42 AM If only he has changed his ways. Great title for this piece. Awesome write Richard. Hugs Richard Lamoureux March 6, 2020 at 12:03 PM Thanks Cecilia. Hugs Rick.

Eileen Manassian March 4, 2020 at 8:11 AM Great poetry... as always. What a great build up to the ending. Richard Lamoureux March 6, 2020 at 12:04 PM Thanks Eileen. ;0)

Alexis Y. February 25, 2020 at 9:40 AM WoW! Richard, I agree with Andrea, this is one of your best. I liked the build up that led to the end. He went from something to nothing and eventually he was no more. Your skill and talent never ceases to amaze me:-) Alexis Richard Lamoureux February 25, 2020 at 11:03 AM You are kind Alexis. Hugs Rick.

Andrea Dietrich February 18, 2020 at 6:25 PM wow, this is REALLY great, Richard. One of your best. Fave for me. I just love how he got smaller and smaller and then became a whisper with nothing to say. Richard Lamoureux February 19, 2020 at 7:17 AM Thanks Andrea.

Brooklyn Cruz February 17, 2020 at 2:40 PM This has a very good message; I'm glad I read it. I love it, good job :) Richard Lamoureux February 19, 2020 at 7:17 AM Thanks Brooklyn.

Ts Poetry February 17, 2020 at 9:25 AM This isn't paperthin as there is much depth....give me depth any day Richard Lamoureux February 17, 2020 at 9:48 AM Thanks TS. ;0)

Robert Kinard February 17, 2020 at 6:38 AM Wow, I like how you did this, and a good story to think about. thanks for sharing. Richard Lamoureux February 17, 2020 at 8:02 AM Thanks Robert. ;0)

Harry Horsman February 17, 2020 at 12:54 AM The change of generations, historics are just that, history. Another intriguing poem from you Richard, always to give the reader, something to think about...love it.. Richard Lamoureux February 17, 2020 at 8:02 AM Much appreciated Harry.

Silent One February 15, 2020 at 10:33 AM Interesting way of looking at him, maybe he was happy to fade away without being remembered... I like how you did this.. Richard Lamoureux February 15, 2020 at 10:43 AM Thanks Silent. ;0)

Linda Milgate February 13, 2020 at 11:56 AM Love this, too true!! Richard Lamoureux February 15, 2020 at 10:17 AM Thanks Linda. Hugs Rick.

Charles Messina February 11, 2020 at 5:16 AM A lost soul. I have some friends who have become this guy. Cool write, Rick. ~Charlie Richard Lamoureux February 11, 2020 at 8:04 AM Thanks Charles. Much appreciated.

Franci Hoffman February 10, 2020 at 11:01 AM A smooth flowing Quatrain and a good story. Well done. Richard Lamoureux February 10, 2020 at 1:12 PM Thanks Franci. ;0)

Gershon Wolf February 9, 2020 at 3:59 PM I think the last dimension was dementia! Enjoyed this muse greatly, Richard. Thanks, Gershon Richard Lamoureux February 10, 2020 at 8:02 AM Thanks Gershon. ;0)

Jennifer Proxenos February 7, 2020 at 12:14 PM Sad that some people do fade into nothing - ' A whisper from yesterday who had nothing to say.' A deep write which is truly thought provoking Blessings, Jenn. Richard Lamoureux February 8, 2020 at 8:11 AM Thanks Jennifer. Hugs Rick.

Anna Hopper February 7, 2020 at 11:51 AM Awesome! I love the flow of the words and the story behind them! Richard Lamoureux February 7, 2020 at 11:52 AM Thanks Anna, Hugs Rick.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 7, 2020 at 3:43 AM - Interesting, Richard ... in the end the dust blows away .... - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Richard Lamoureux February 7, 2020 at 8:20 AM Thanks Anne-Lise. HugsRick.

Gordon Mcconnell February 6, 2020 at 5:28 PM Nice write Richard,liked your rhyme and flow bringing home great expression too. Richard Lamoureux February 6, 2020 at 6:08 PM Thanks Gordon.

Leo Larry Amadore February 6, 2020 at 3:38 PM Thoughtful, clever, amusing, well-worded and metered, and a reflection of some validity when considered as applicable to many of us (perhaps to my shivering self?) and to our diminishing opinions of our own thoughts and writings..... Richard Lamoureux February 6, 2020 at 4:11 PM Thanks Leo, I appreciate the thought and the visit.

Michelle Faulkner February 6, 2020 at 1:44 PM So melancholy - and (perhaps ironically) multi layered, well thought out write, Richard- Richard Lamoureux February 6, 2020 at 4:11 PM Thanks Michelle.

Daniel Turner February 6, 2020 at 10:35 AM Reminds me of the song John Lennon wrote called. "Nowhere Man" Richard, eventually we all fade away. Richard Lamoureux February 6, 2020 at 10:37 AM Do you think so? Thanks for commenting. ;0)

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