Subconciously

Subconsciously I'm alive in this skeletal frame
Why I am here belongs to this living worlds fame

I was but a child, when it all happened years ago
At the place called the Ness, that stemmed my younger grow

Please look through my eyes and picture what I see
Live with me the feeling of what life is supposed to be

How fast can you run if you have a sibling chasing thee
Do you give into him, and be the weakling so dad can see

Being the faster allows the luxury, to look back and view
To be the one who's ahead as he turns his head askew

For he can no longer indulge, in front is where he's to be
To allow his younger brother to play catch up, oh we'll see

This moment is about to haunt me, it's scary for I shall know
No boo! can ever rival, that will stem our younger grow

As I sail the clouds of gone and retire to where I now live
I happen to come across another sibling who may be sieved

Looking down from the heavens as I trawl the unfortunate
Like a Praying Mantis in hope as we ready to deliver wait

Just at the moment of strike, I lure his head to see
My brothers son called Liam, is he who stares back at me

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 6/24/2011 3:15:00 AM
The sibling contest move on, no escape, interesting concept:) Yes Carolyn might have smiled a little. thanks mate, Don
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Date: 6/21/2011 3:57:00 PM
I feel your childhood pain in each word written here.. and thanks for your ever wonderful comments on my poetry~~
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Date: 6/20/2011 4:33:00 AM
Wonderful poetry James , read a few times ,every time you sense a new bit. inspired poem. Anne
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Date: 6/19/2011 7:17:00 PM
A wonderful poem here James..liked it.Thanks for your inspiring words at my pages.
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Date: 6/19/2011 12:31:00 PM
did you say Vess? oh, i still remember my piece! what a piece worth all the wonderful reminesces, james! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 6/19/2011 8:54:00 AM
I enjoyed the write James, but do not quite ''get it'' all, anyway thank you for posting and commenting..
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Date: 6/18/2011 6:02:00 PM
So much like your brother?...Enjoyed reading this eve..Thanks for your presence at my work today..I appreciate you stopping by and taking time to comment..Have a great week end..Sara
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Date: 6/18/2011 12:06:00 PM
A beautiful piece of poetry when a poet is at his best, james
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