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Storm Brewing

As I stepped out
onto the porch this evening
I felt unnerved
by the atmosphere
There was nothing but
calm stillness, and yet-
it bore a hint
of turbulence so small
as to only be perceived
in an odd sensation
on my skin

Thinking of the calm
before a storm
I hastily scanned the sky
searching for an ominous sign
But the sky was clear
albeit a weird mixture of hues
with too many shades of
Barbie pink overshadowing
the dusky purples and blues

The yard itself seemed
normal-but-surreal, too...
and looking at the
technicolor-green grass
I felt overwhelmed by
a heavy stillness in the air

As though I were trapped
in a vivid photograph
the only thing still alive
still moving- and suddenly
utterly oppressed
by a feeling of uselessness
with no idea of what
to do with myself
I felt a crazy impulse
to run away; as if
my presence there
was the problem
and that by leaving I might
find my way back
to other living (moving) things.

Inside once more
I now find the surreal stillness
has moved inside the house...
casting a pall over
the living space and
stretching down the hall

I fancy it has followed me
edging closer, stalking me
quickly closing in-
but as the feeling begins
to encapsulate me-
I am shocked to realize
that the turbulence feels
strangely familiar

I had only noticed it
in the stillness
away from daily distractions... 
but it was within me
from the start.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 11/19/2018 12:53:00 PM
Woah, yes like WW says, this poem had STATIC! Actually a bit hair-raising! I love the brilliant mood of this and the powerful twist. I’m literally still prickling! A fave!
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Rhona McFerran
Date: 11/19/2018 1:15:00 PM
Thank you, Nina! I'm glad the mood translated so well! ;)
Date: 11/19/2018 10:10:00 AM
Very deep writing my friend...I could feel the static air...love & light...^WW^
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Rhona McFerran
Date: 11/19/2018 10:23:00 AM
Thank you, my winged friend!! ;)
Date: 11/19/2018 8:39:00 AM
This was really deep Rhona and I felt this because I know this feeling. To feel the uneasiness in the air. Not something we can explain but it is something definitely felt and it does seem to follow like an invisible shadow as close. You have described this feeling well in your wonderful poem.
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Rhona McFerran
Date: 11/19/2018 8:51:00 AM
Thank you for the lovely comment, Chris! ;) Glad you enjoyed it!
Date: 11/19/2018 7:34:00 AM
Beautifully written Rhona. This carried me off to that surreal world where the "us" of "us" resides.
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Rhona McFerran
Date: 11/19/2018 7:48:00 AM
I am glad this made sense to someone else... ;) Thank you so much for your comment!