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Storm Brewing

As I stepped out onto the porch this evening I felt unnerved by the atmosphere There was nothing but calm stillness, and yet- it bore a hint of turbulence so small as to only be perceived in an odd sensation on my skin Thinking of the calm before a storm I hastily scanned the sky searching for an ominous sign But the sky was clear albeit a weird mixture of hues with too many shades of Barbie pink overshadowing the dusky purples and blues The yard itself seemed normal-but-surreal, too... and looking at the technicolor-green grass I felt overwhelmed by a heavy stillness in the air As though I were trapped in a vivid photograph the only thing still alive still moving- and suddenly utterly oppressed by a feeling of uselessness with no idea of what to do with myself I felt a crazy impulse to run away; as if my presence there was the problem and that by leaving I might find my way back to other living (moving) things. Inside once more I now find the surreal stillness has moved inside the house... casting a pall over the living space and stretching down the hall I fancy it has followed me edging closer, stalking me quickly closing in- but as the feeling begins to encapsulate me- I am shocked to realize that the turbulence feels strangely familiar I had only noticed it in the stillness away from daily distractions... but it was within me from the start.

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Date: 11/19/2018 10:10:00 AM
Very deep writing my friend...I could feel the static air...love & light...^WW^
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 11/19/2018 10:23:00 AM
Thank you, my winged friend!! ;)
Date: 11/19/2018 8:39:00 AM
This was really deep Rhona and I felt this because I know this feeling. To feel the uneasiness in the air. Not something we can explain but it is something definitely felt and it does seem to follow like an invisible shadow as close. You have described this feeling well in your wonderful poem.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 11/19/2018 8:51:00 AM
Thank you for the lovely comment, Chris! ;) Glad you enjoyed it!
Date: 11/19/2018 7:34:00 AM
Beautifully written Rhona. This carried me off to that surreal world where the "us" of "us" resides.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 11/19/2018 7:48:00 AM
I am glad this made sense to someone else... ;) Thank you so much for your comment!

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