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Stone Steps of the Asylum

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Using Suzette Richards' new form - Phoenix Sixain. Resurrect 5 consecutive lines from an older write. Use a word from each line for the 6th line (with allowance for slight grammatical adjustment for final line so it reads well)

do we follow the sun at different speeds or have different suns I whisper to the trees to teach me to grow ask how [stone] steps endure me, retain their integrity we have whispers to endure

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Ink Empress

Date: 1/10/2025 4:35:00 AM

I think this is my favorite! Ah that opening i remember that line from a previous poem of yours yes! And its beyond deep and just moving! Love all your takes . But this one is a personal fave for me! Best wishes

Ink Empress
Date: 1/10/2025 5:37:00 AM

Hahah I laughed so much when she criticized his brushstrokes! Lol gosh was hilarious

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/10/2025 5:00:00 AM

Yes, I did love this poem and painting too. It just felt very evocative and enveloping to write (the longer version). It worked nicely to crop from for this form too. When Philomena Cunk criticised Van Gogh it hit hard haha

Chetta Achara

Date: 1/9/2025 12:21:00 PM

Beautiful.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/9/2025 1:50:00 PM

Thank you Chetta. This form was lovely to use - a little like a haibun as the final line moves to summarise. Thank you for your kind feedback