Stone Rose

I remember those days when I'd pray it would rain My heart then a vibrant flower in full bloom I recall the drops hiding tears from unending pain Trying to mask the scent of betrayal's perfume My heart then a vibrant flower in full bloom She forgave freely without regard for her sanity Trying to mask the scent of betrayal's perfume Her petals slowly petrify surrounded by inanity She forgave freely without regard for her sanity Though that flower still holds her beautiful pose Her petals slowly petrify surrounded by inanity They can no longer get to that perfect stone rose Though that flower still holds her beautiful pose I recall the drops hiding tears from unending pain They can no longer get to that perfect stone rose I remember those days when I'd pray it would rain 10/13/2016

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/17/2020 8:30:00 AM

I enjoyed reading this one again. Hugs Rick.

Fj Thomas
Date: 2/18/2020 7:28:00 PM

Thank you again Rick :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/28/2018 8:49:00 AM

What an amazing piece. I’m glad I stopped by today.

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/28/2018 2:23:00 PM

I am too :) Thank you Rick.

Wendy Nipas

Date: 4/19/2018 12:17:00 PM

Beautiful, but sad at the same time. I love your use of words, thank you.

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/19/2018 2:36:00 PM

Thanks so much Wendy :)

Maria Williams

Date: 4/13/2018 6:19:00 PM

I enjoyed this lovely descriptive Pantoum, congratulations on your marvelous win....Maria xx

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/14/2018 8:43:00 AM

Morning Maria :) Thank you very much Lady ;)

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/8/2018 10:02:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Shadow. Beautiful pantoum.

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/9/2018 9:47:00 AM

Good morning Line. Thanks so much!

Dm Babbit

Date: 4/4/2018 9:03:00 AM

Beauty too often is unseen or found too late. Such a wonderful turn around on the beauty of life. TY

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/5/2018 10:41:00 AM

Thank you very much DM

Susan Gentry

Date: 3/27/2018 9:02:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! A wonderful Pantoum.

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 10:15:00 PM

Hi Susan. Thanks so much :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/27/2018 7:25:00 PM

Your beautiful title and melancholy poem conveys a sad hardening of a tender heart, which is very sad indeed, Shadow. Your poetic lines are beautifully poignant, especially the last.. congratulations on your wonderful win! Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 10:15:00 PM

Susan you nailed the meaning directly on the head! I'm very happy you got it. Thank you!

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/27/2018 6:03:00 PM

You have woven a personal story, and the last line couldn't have been a better finale' to your deeply moving poem :) Congratulations Shadow!

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 10:14:00 PM

Thanks for that Carrie. I was not happy with the end result but that makes me feel better.

Jan Allison

Date: 3/27/2018 4:04:00 PM

a perfectly penned pantoum poem Shadow! many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 4:29:00 PM

Ahh a visit from royalty! I am humbled dear Lady. Thank you ;•»

Silent One

Date: 3/27/2018 2:17:00 PM

I do love a pantoum and this one flows really well...

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 4:26:00 PM

Hi there S1. Thank you kindly sir ;)

Eve Roper

Date: 3/27/2018 12:34:00 PM

Congratulations on your win , sweet lady, enjoyed reading! Have a nice Easter Hugs Eve ~`*

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 4:26:00 PM

Hello Eve :) thanks so much my talented friend!

Lu Loo

Date: 3/27/2018 9:55:00 AM

i love the name and that first stanza is amazing. great pantoum... thank you and congratulations :)-luloo

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 11:27:00 AM

Thank you so very much LuLoo!

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 3/27/2018 8:40:00 AM

So moving - lovely!

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 9:27:00 AM

Thank you Michelle :)

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/27/2018 5:32:00 AM

Good Morning Shadow Your pantoum format looks in wonderful form. I enjoy titles and I very much liked your title for I found it poetic all on its own. Marvelous work in all areas including the voice and tone.

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 8:07:00 AM

Thank you Lisa :) I do hope to be able to comment on your poetry soon. Your works are quite beautiful. Please consider allowing it. I did see your blog and look forward to seeing the wonderful comments you will get. ...and ignoring any stupid ones lol.

Mick Talbot

Date: 3/26/2018 8:47:00 PM

Another perfect pantoum flowed wonderfully! Going to have another go... Mick

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 8:03:00 AM

Well thank you sir! Good morning Mick :)

Probir Gupta

Date: 3/26/2018 8:45:00 PM

Enjoyed reading the nice pantoum ...

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/27/2018 8:03:00 AM

Thank you very much Probir :)