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Sanctuary, Soft, Stir, Surreal Words Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Constance le France 03/03/24 HMS 

 

stir

Much of what I say might sound like it’s 
  stirring up trouble, but it's the truth!
              Quote by Malcolm X
                    
                          stir

           the wind changed slightly 
         that day i picked up a stone 
               moving some atoms
          instead of leaving them be 
         consequence rearranged me
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La France Avatar
March 8, 2024 at 9:15 AM
David, you have penned a wonderful poem, congratulations on your win in my contest, blessings, Constance
Kavanagh  Avatar
March 8, 2024 at 3:06 PM
Heya Constance, always a pleasure to take part in your inspiring words contests, thanks so much for the placement, cheers David
Goldsmith Avatar
March 7, 2024 at 1:08 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your very creative "Stir" write. Few words with much said/to think about. Have a great day with your wonderful win..................
Kavanagh  Avatar
March 7, 2024 at 1:38 PM
Thanks so much Paula for sharing the good news, sometimes a few words is all that’s needed to get us thinking much deeper, cheers David
Radice Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 2:17 PM
You've stirred my thinking David. Chemistry, physics..these things were not my strong subjects back in my school days..I know each time we move something the atoms are rearranged but that something doesn't change shape..unless there's a chemical reaction of sorts..Your poetry is unique. I find it fascinating but never have an answer to the ideas you put forward or suggest. I'm left with jigsaw pieces trying to put it all together, often failing but very much enjoying the process. Cheers - Gary
Kavanagh  Avatar
March 4, 2024 at 3:53 AM
We are all missing pieces Gary! Don’t let anyone tell you they’re not!
Radice Avatar
March 4, 2024 at 3:40 AM
I hear you David. It's not the jigsaw that's missing a piece, I think it's me. :) Cheers - Gary
Kavanagh  Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 2:41 PM
Heya Gary, let’s look at this another way, Perhaps I threw the stone, and the wind slightly changed its trajectory, and one thing led to another that mostly went unseen til years later, then the consequences became apparent one day, but not before they had rearranged part of me, I hope this analogy may help you with that jigsaw, or have I totally messed it up lol! Cheers David
Poet Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 12:43 PM
David, your poem is unique. Your clever and eloquent incorporation of physics is truly amazing. You impress us with your mastery of cause and effect, truly a genius. Your work gracefully offers intriguing concepts and a ripple effect.
Kavanagh  Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 1:31 PM
High praise Lasaad, although I’m far from a genius, more a thinker or freethinker perhaps, I like to ponder physics from a quantum level to the cosmological one, nobody as yet has reconciled both with a GUT, (grand unified theory) myself I’m leaning toward consciousness as the reconciling intermediary, cheers David
One Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 12:02 PM
Very clever David.. I think this is the only one I have seen, using the word stir...
Kavanagh  Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 12:40 PM
Thank you S1, hopefully writing this one doesn’t stir up an international incident lol! Cheers David
Anaya Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 9:56 AM
Love the way you applied your grasp for physics, genius to stir us with cause & effect. Jainists would smile knowingly!
Kavanagh  Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 12:37 PM
I’m not sure about the actual butterfly effect per se, (hurricanes caused by a butterfly flapping its wings) but certainly an asteroid can get an imperceptible nudge or a tug of gravity that eventually puts it on a collision course with earth!
Anaya Avatar
March 3, 2024 at 11:58 AM
The butterfly effect(in chaos theory) the phenomenon whereby a minute localized change in a complex system can have large effects elsewhere. I want to explore it and write down something that I can get something out of. D is right about effects both ways, plenty of examples.
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March 3, 2024 at 10:38 AM
Heya Anaya, they probably would, but perhaps would not approve of my carnivore lifestyle lol! over time that one insignificant disruption can lead to a catastrophic order of consequences locally or universally methinks, cheers David
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