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STILLBIRTH - LOVE WITHOUT HOPE - EMOTIVE WRITE Premiere Contest Winner

From the very moment you were conceived I loved you I could feel you kick, as a new life grew inside me One day you stopped moving, and tragically I knew Holding my newborn baby was never meant to be Original Laura Loo's contest Weepy Quatrain awarded 1st place Submitted to best poem from any of Laura Loo's contests 03~29~16

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Date: 9/18/2016 10:43:00 PM
Jan, congrats on your fine win again with this well deserved poem. Hugs, Afzal.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 9/19/2016 9:34:00 AM
Thanks Afzal:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 9/18/2016 6:01:00 PM
Jan-still breaks my heart when I read this- I have re-read it many a time and will always be one of my favorite poems you have written...congratulations on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 9/19/2016 9:34:00 AM
Thanks LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/2/2016 8:33:00 AM
Congrats, Jan. you spoke from the heart and allowed us to feel your emotions. So well written. Kathy
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/3/2016 5:41:00 PM
Thanks so much Kathleen:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/24/2016 5:00:00 PM
Beautiful.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 5/24/2016 5:33:00 PM
Thanks so much Jean its such a sad poem I was delighted LuLoo liked it so much:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/24/2016 7:46:00 AM
You certainly channeled the sad with this one. Congrats on top spot.
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Date: 5/24/2016 3:22:00 PM
Thanks Richard I have memories from when I was doing my training and a colleague had a still born baby and never ever got over the loss:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/23/2016 6:18:00 PM
Jan congratulations on a brilliant win .....Seren
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Date: 5/24/2016 3:21:00 PM
Thanks Seren:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/23/2016 12:13:00 PM
Congratulations Jan...A sad but beautiful win...
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 5/24/2016 3:20:00 PM
Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/23/2016 10:18:00 AM
Jan, your poem touched an emotive chord. I felt the pain of loss of a still birth - of the mother and that of a father. I was going to write on this theme but my memories were too painful. Congrats on a very fine win and an excellent poem. ~karam~
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 5/24/2016 3:20:00 PM
Thanks Karam it is such a sad subject and I'm so sorry for you it is a true experience I can't imagine the pain of losing a child:-( I'm glad LuLoo liked my poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/22/2016 9:25:00 PM
Jan, congratulations on your top win! Janice
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Date: 5/23/2016 1:17:00 AM
Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/22/2016 8:47:00 PM
Jan, back to congratulate you on your win!
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Date: 5/23/2016 1:17:00 AM
Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/22/2016 8:29:00 PM
wow, a very big congrats to you, Jan. you got yourself a trophy now!!! ( I think you do. If this was an old one, it may appear on that older page)
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Date: 5/23/2016 1:18:00 AM
Thanks Andrea I am stunned to receive a trophy never thought it would happen to me as I enter few of these premier contests:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/22/2016 8:17:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your top of the podium win, Jan! Hugs, Sandra
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 5/23/2016 1:18:00 AM
Thanks Sandra I'm delighted:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/22/2016 7:49:00 PM
Congratulation on your superb win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/23/2016 1:19:00 AM
Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/22/2016 7:11:00 PM
Jan...tears tears tears...keep falling...:( this broke my heart and it was exactly what I was looking for. Thank you for being a part of my contest and congrats on your 1st place...be blessed lady :)-luloo
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 5/23/2016 1:16:00 AM
OH WOW LuLoo I am absolutely made up - its an emotive write and I'm so pleased and stunned to get a first in a premier contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/7/2016 6:06:00 AM
Thank you for the comment on my comment. Have a lovely day Jan.... pd
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/7/2016 6:25:00 AM
:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/6/2016 11:35:00 PM
Jan, Congrats on your "Love Without Hope" win ... LINDA
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/7/2016 4:44:00 AM
Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/3/2016 3:02:00 PM
A tribute of love to a little soul.
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Date: 4/3/2016 3:03:00 PM
Thanks Shirley:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/2/2016 1:36:00 PM
Jan, I can't read this without tears..very emotive..congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/2/2016 1:50:00 PM
Oh LuLoo it is such an emotional poem I found it hard to write but I have to go with the flow of my muse and this is where she took me :-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/2/2016 12:04:00 PM
I appreciate your feelings though not experienced by you. But cruel facts appear in Life. Anisha D
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/2/2016 12:06:00 PM
Thanks Anisha it is an emotive write I am thankful it is not something I have ever experienced:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/2/2016 7:18:00 AM
This is so sad good words from a broken heart, God bless you x
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/2/2016 11:17:00 AM
I'm thankful it is fiction for me Wendy but I based the poem from the experience of someone I knew when I was 16 or 17:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/2/2016 12:39:00 AM
Quite sad n emotive..Congrats on great win with this lovely write Jan.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/2/2016 4:44:00 AM
Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/1/2016 10:27:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! I can feel the sadness...it reminds me of my own bad time.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/2/2016 4:44:00 AM
Thanks Meenakshi It is a very emotional poem I know from the comments how many people have experience of this tragic event:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/1/2016 5:59:00 PM
:'( heartfelt! Congratulations on your win!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/1/2016 6:02:00 PM
Many thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/1/2016 8:38:00 AM
Your poem was awesome, creative and unique. You did a wonderful job with the topic “Love Without Hope” ..Congratulations on your placement..Sara The loss of a child must be the worst experience that a person could go through.I could feel your grief and your acceptance in these four lines.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/1/2016 8:58:00 AM
Many thanks Sara - it really was emotional writing this poem - thanks for a great contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/1/2016 8:27:00 AM
This really touches the heart, Jan. A sad but well-written poem. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/1/2016 8:31:00 AM
Thanks so much Sandra:-) hugs jan xx
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