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Still Out Back

Hints of warmer days and barbeque dreams filter through the last gasps of winter air cold drinks and late nights soon to be seen through tiny openings of the back door screen I've been knocked down, stained and hammered screwed tight over and over and about to be stripped laid out, measured, broken, rotted and ripped rained on, burnt up and walked upon by lesser men I'm weathered and worn but I'm still alive out back my creaks tell a different story as I sway in the wind inebriated adventures still speak of regretful moments of sin the birds have all used me and I'm barely hanging on Still standing in a spot of your last shooting star wish Waiting for some attention and that first springtime kiss

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Date: 3/21/2017 11:42:00 AM
Your use of words is beautiful and thought provoking. Great job!
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Date: 3/16/2017 3:03:00 PM
"The birds have all used me" - Ha! Love it, Tim. : ) Oh yes - did you hear about the drunk guy that walked into a bar through the screen door? --Really strained himself.
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Date: 3/16/2017 12:21:00 AM
Oh Tim, you an I both standing and wishing... Great...
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Date: 3/11/2017 5:40:00 AM
Is it beautiful to be expecting better days while reminiscing beautiful ones! A fantastic writing my friend, Tim! Be brave winter is over, spring just around the corner! haha!
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Date: 3/11/2017 2:48:00 AM
Hah! I think you are a rickety bench! Don't kick me if I am wrong :) But whatever you are, you once were beautiful, seen a lot, been trampled, but still fiercely alive. And you have a way with words :)
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Date: 3/10/2017 11:43:00 PM
Love the imagery :-) I'm ready for the summer fun ~*
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Date: 3/10/2017 9:33:00 PM
Beautiful again, oh well at least I can help out with the drinks and BBQ part!
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Date: 3/10/2017 6:18:00 PM
this is FANTASTIC personification, Tim. I love it. FAVE
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Date: 3/10/2017 4:34:00 PM
Hello Tim. You may be out back but you are not out. This is lovely and the meaning of waiting with hope and dreams say it all and to me that springtime kiss is that hope and dream and yes attention. This is just my small opinion of course. I very much enjoyed this. Well done throughout and beautiful poetry.
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Date: 3/10/2017 2:56:00 PM
Oh the hope that springtime brings :-) A very 'real' write Tim, many challenges faced, some won, some lost yet one look at the 'stars' and possibilities seem endless.:-) I love this, a fave, 7++++ :-) blessings and happy spring to you :-) lynn
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Date: 3/10/2017 2:35:00 PM
This poem really moves along Tim. I love how you ended this too :)
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Date: 3/10/2017 2:07:00 PM
Tim, this is great, I kept seeing so many different images as I read but found that none of them mattered much once I got to the ending. Really nicely done.
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Date: 3/10/2017 1:49:00 PM
The ending is so romantic, full of hope.. It seems we were both thinking of stars in a different way, because I posted a poem ending with star thoughts, your verse is much more intense than mine... Love the shifting in yr poem from sad, bruised to a beautiful ending. A fave.
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Tim Smith
Date: 3/10/2017 1:51:00 PM
Thanks very much know I do love the stars : )