Steps

 Take them up a bit
Step down and disconnect yet
Well oriented

Follow the rhythm
Fall into run, then schism
Palladium's glow

Hang on, two flights left
Three ahead then go right
Welcome home, goodnight

All this time, and the elevator still remains 'Out of Order.'

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Poet Destroyer A

July 16, 2012 at 4:11 AM

Hi TIm, stopping by to say good night~PD

Andrea Dietrich

April 17, 2012 at 7:27 PM

haha, Tim, I love the ending of this. And how the elevator is still out of order. thanks for your comment. I love writing sonnets, I do.

Nette Onclaud

April 17, 2012 at 2:56 PM

you make me rave, tim... a collection of delight and surprises... into the winners' list!!.. fantastic!..:) huggs!

Sara Kendrick

April 16, 2012 at 5:48 AM

Good one..Got a chuckle and don't know if you intended it to be funny...Thanks for stopping by..I appreciate the little note about me leaving out a word in my work "Corrosion And Rust"...I wrestled with that line for I was trying to a count of 8,6,8,6..I tried all kinds of ways to make it work so I left it without the I or we....I figured the human mind would say I or we should be there..Thanks again..Sara

Tim B

April 16, 2012 at 11:56 AM

I did intend a chuckle :). Yes, on your poem I did surmise that you may have done it on purpose, but thought I would make sure. You are right though, the mind does generally interpret the word as being there. Thanks for stopping by.