Stepping Out One Evening

A warped board on a bench seat
causing discomfort 
to an old bum, an aching foot,
a touch of pity all came to keep me
self-sealed inside a bag of skin. 
I took no note of the river
almost licking at my feet, 
the evening's prayerful quiet,
the sky slowly switching on
its nightly extravaganza of stars.
I was too far into myself
to see past my rim.

One can get lost in a stare,
that blank, formless blur 
reflecting the endless distances
stretching across the self.
I was bubbled there.
Then slowly things happened,
a tugboat went past, seagulls 
protested my presence,
the smell of river mud
thickened the air.
I stepped out and saw
an old man on a bench seat
who I have long known,
brushed the dandruff 
from his shoulders,
helped him up and walked
him home.

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Date: 3/15/2024 5:13:00 PM
Dear Paul, What a poignant exploration of human connection and the power of empathy. Your artistic imagery of the warped board and the old man on the bench seat evokes a sense of shared humanity and the importance of reaching beyond our own concerns. I love how your words gently remind us to step outside of ourselves and extend kindness to others. Paul this is a touching reflection on the beauty of compassion. - Blessings, Daniel
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Paul Willason
Date: 3/16/2024 5:46:00 PM
Again, Daniel, you do my poetry an honor in the careful and thoughtful analysis you give it...so grateful. Look forward in learning how a poem comes across...each has its own life when it leaves the pen and can take on multiple interpretations...yours very much valued. Sincere thanks my friend...
Date: 3/15/2024 6:05:00 AM
Paul, you have a genuine talent to place your readers inside the scenes you paint with words. Sometimes, I find myself staring but not seeing what's visible to my eyes because my vision is blurred by what my mind sees instead of my eyes. Your ending to these lines is insightful as to how we may see ourselves.
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Paul Willason
Date: 3/16/2024 5:27:00 PM
Must confess I simply glow in the light of your kind words dear Lin. It is so encouraging to receive such acknowledgement of what works in my little creations...treasured feedback. Always a challlenge for the poet to know when to get out of the way and let what is being observed speak for itself. I have problems at times. Take care my friend...
Date: 3/15/2024 4:19:00 AM
A lovely poem. Nature is lovely. It's good to be outdoors.
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Paul Willason
Date: 3/16/2024 5:10:00 PM
Pleased that you visited the poem Jeanette....very much appreciate your kind words. Thankyou.
Date: 3/15/2024 4:02:00 AM
Oh Paul WOW!! This poem is just so wonderful, clever, beautiful and touching! I was there (again ha!) experiencing it all from your amazing imagery and words….you just draw me in! A heart honest write my Aussie friend! Debx
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Date: 3/16/2024 5:08:00 PM
Quite overwhelmed by your commemts Deb, thankyou so much. Sometimes you never know how a poem will land. As I write, I seem to live in the words for that moment, becomes almost a sensory experience. Good to learn that maybe a little of this finds its way out. Honored to be your Aussie friend dear Deb.
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