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Standing Alone On This Beach

Standing alone on this beach Standing alone on this beach remembering the sun greeting the horizon, draping an aquamarine skyline in swirling watercolor ribbons enticing twilight to make an appearance and the seashells we collected while leaving our footprints beneath a cheerful summer moon sharing warm kisses as cool water caressed our toes where you drew a heart in the sand, and we stood inside promising to love each other forever, then counted every star in the heavens until the dawn returned Now a desolate shore scattered with mother of pearl shards weeps beneath cold clouded skies, saturated by a sorrowed surf of wistful waves retreating from the broken heart I’ve drawn in the sand, one set of footprints within, no longer counting stars, not caring if dawn ever returns, standing alone on this beach . . . without you Written for the Lost Love - Free Verse or Rhyme Poetry Contest Sponsored by John Hamilton

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Date: 5/14/2017 9:11:00 PM
Congratulations, Chris, on a much deserved win!
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:21:00 AM
Thank you so very much Kim.
Date: 5/14/2017 10:37:00 AM
Well now, I told you on Friday I couldn't make any promise of bothering you on Monday. However, I never said or promised on bothering you on Sunday (ha ha). Congratulations on your amazing placement. Be proud. Honestly. Wonderful all the way. And yes, Morning Chris. PS I still make no promises regarding Monday Morning.(another ha ha).....
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:20:00 AM
Thank you so much Lisa...it is Monday, but I can still pretend it is Sunday...oh, except I am at work so it is definitely a Monday. My imagination isn't that good. :) I appreciate you my friend.
Date: 5/14/2017 9:17:00 AM
Such a moving poem Chris many congrats on your win - I loved the other poem you wrote too :-):-) hugs jan xx
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:19:00 AM
Thank you Jan for your nice comments. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one.
Date: 5/14/2017 8:36:00 AM
I've nothing but accolades to give all of your poetry, Chris. Congratulations on this one!
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:18:00 AM
Thank you so very much Lin. I am happy you liked this one.
Date: 5/14/2017 5:34:00 AM
Congratulations on 2nd place Chris . The poem is absolutely beautiful, a winner in my eyes. A 7++ Maria
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:18:00 AM
Thank you Maria so much for your wonderful comments. I appreciate your kindness
Date: 5/14/2017 5:34:00 AM
This is a piece of magic for sure!! Congrats on your placement it is well deserved
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:18:00 AM
Thank you so very much Brian.
Date: 5/14/2017 1:12:00 AM
2nd place my dear friend! I HAD to come back with congratulations :)
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:18:00 AM
Thanks so much Darren. :)
Date: 5/13/2017 11:05:00 PM
A truly moving poem that embraces the aching heart with memories that once held such magic. This is so beautiful Chris! Congratulations on your well deserved second place. It is a first place for me! : ) 7
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:17:00 AM
Thank you so very much Connie. I am happy you liked this one. I always appreciate your visits my friend.
Date: 5/13/2017 10:02:00 PM
Many beautiful lines here Chris. Very emotional and image filled.
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:17:00 AM
Thanks so very much James.
Date: 5/13/2017 6:36:00 PM
Superbly done my friend ...Congrats on placement Chriss...beaches can be awfully lonely without your mate...all the best...^WW^
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:16:00 AM
Thanks so very much for your kind thoughts
Date: 5/13/2017 5:46:00 PM
Good choice Chris really tugged at the heartstrings, congrats on a fine win!
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Chris Green
Date: 5/15/2017 8:15:00 AM
Thanks so much John. I am happy you liked it.
Date: 5/12/2017 2:04:00 AM
*Sits here, twiddling thumbs, eagerly awaiting your final verdict* ;)
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Chris Green
Date: 5/12/2017 8:14:00 AM
I believe I will use this one. :)
Date: 5/11/2017 9:48:00 PM
I read both of them twice, and this one is what I would call a surer bet, but I really like the other one, maybe because it is done in a strikingly different style, with an unexpected ending.
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Chris Green
Date: 5/12/2017 8:10:00 AM
Thanks so very much my friend. I think I will go with this one. I appreciate your thoughts and comments.
Date: 5/11/2017 6:46:00 PM
Both are great choices Chris, even with the varying styles. I posted comments on both of these on your other entry prior to this comment. Excellent :)
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Chris Green
Date: 5/12/2017 8:10:00 AM
Thanks so much Lenna, I will head over to that poem in a few minutes. : )
Date: 5/11/2017 5:19:00 PM
I really really love this. So poignant, and for me, it's already a winner :) a fave, one of many of yours that I'll reread :)
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Chris Green
Date: 5/11/2017 6:05:00 PM
Thank you Kina, you nice words mean so much to me. I am happy you liked this one so much.
Date: 5/11/2017 4:48:00 PM
Hi again Chris. This is just my small opinion of course. What do I know. Nothing. However, after seeing both entries for your selection. Know this not because you incorporate the ocean in your scene. It is completely and entirely your words and expression that define loss. The emotive factor is ever present, the voice and tone are both reflective. The pain and state of mind are evident and clear in this entry. I would choose this if you were looking to decide. Your work is solid. Honestly.
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Chris Green
Date: 5/11/2017 6:04:00 PM
Thank you Lisa, I always value your opinion. I think I will sleep on it and make my decision in the morning. I am thrilled however that you really enjoyed this one. I appreciate you my friend.
Date: 5/11/2017 4:43:00 PM
this one is beautiful, chris. a poignant depiction of lost love with a perfect ending. sounds like a winner to me...
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Chris Green
Date: 5/11/2017 6:03:00 PM
Thank you so very much Ilene.
Date: 5/11/2017 4:19:00 PM
This is beautiful and sad and beautiful and sad...It moved me deeply...And so loved the way it ended in the last lines..Both great for the entry..This is my favourite..but I like sand..footprints...ocean...I love the way you used so much of the senses..I can feel ..see..almost smell...the goodbye tears..and loniliness...A fave.
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Chris Green
Date: 5/11/2017 6:03:00 PM
Thank you so very much my sweet friend. I am thrilled you liked this one so much to come back and read it again.
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 5/11/2017 4:54:00 PM
Rereading this beauty..I love this poem.

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