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Spotted Fawn

I spied a little spotted fawn Cavorting, dancing on my lawn With legs that seemed of rubber made Or springs or airy wings instead. He bounced, he played out in the sun, He lept, he raced, was having fun. He darted, wild, without a qualm, Then heard a noise and dashed to mom. O little one, I’m blessed, you know, To gaze at you, to watch you grow. A day will come to raise alarm; For now, you’re safe here, free from harm. Until then, dance, cavort, be free And come again to visit me.

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Date: 10/22/2022 10:39:00 AM
Jeff... I truly do love half rhymes, but I'm having a hard time with "made/instead" & "qualm/mom". This poem is solid in my book, and who am I to play the critic; but since the chosen form was "rhyme" hahaha... I'm trying to rhyme every line hahaha...
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Jeff Connelly
Date: 10/22/2022 12:26:00 PM
Perhaps, rubber... rhubarb ??... First word that came to mind ??
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 10/22/2022 12:19:00 PM
Sometimes, a near rhyme... Been messing with assonance lately, interesting, but a different sort of challenge. rubber bred/instead doesnt quite work, neither does rubber tread, lol. I have fewer qualms about mom, but technically, true dat! There are some contests where I wouldn't have been able to enter this one, to be sure. Thanks for the read and the observations!

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