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Split Wide Open

As I gaze upon my shadow, it appears to grow a hole Just where my heart belongs, morphs a void into my soul Open to all the elements, sunlight shines right through split second after a cannonball ripped my chest in two Give back my innards Return this heart to me Fill this visceral hole And leave my body be Still I look upon my shadow, now appears to sprout wings emanating from my loins, fledge red abstract things Open to all the elements, thermal winds raise me high One moment after shrapnel, blew my atoms into the sky Give back my sinews Return pink mist to me Feed off your own evil Go away leave mine be Now searching for my shadow, it’s gone can’t be seen I haven’t got any eyes, only contours in between No need for rare elements, when sublimating the earth oh come closer afterlife, from my quanta seed rebirth Give back my conscious Return those eyes to me Let meaning have a purpose And leave my shadow be This or That, Vol 12 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh Split wide open 06/07/22

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 7/2/2022 5:40:00 PM

Quite a marvelous piece with amazing imagery, David:-) Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/3/2022 12:46:00 AM

If I only had a heart Edward, or indeed a couple of atoms left after that run in with the cannonball, thank you for the placement, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/2/2022 11:21:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A "Creative" write/story. Have a blessed/weekend................

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/2/2022 12:55:00 PM

Heya Paula, thank you so much, it’s a abstract perspective on the contest theme of being split wide open, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/2/2022 7:57:00 AM

David, back with congratulations on your excellent win. You penned such a stunning Poem. Have a lovely weekend.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/2/2022 8:33:00 AM

Thank you Lasaad for the good tidings, I’m always delighted to make the cut, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/7/2022 4:49:00 PM

David, your writing is so excellent that I was fascinated as I read every word. And y You did a brilliant job portraying the passage from this earth toward the next. This is a conceptual approach to death and your perspective of the dying moments of a person's body. I am ecstatic to realize that you have composed something that is incredibly clever, extensive, and poetic.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/8/2022 12:03:00 AM

High praise Lasaad, thank you for such a comprehensive positive overview of my poem, of course it’s conceptually abstract, using the shadow to illustrate the bigger picture, came perhaps as an afterthought, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/7/2022 4:26:00 PM

You captured the exit from this life to the next well David. I'm sure all sorts of things come to mind at the end Don't forget a coin for Charon. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/8/2022 5:29:00 AM

Of course and cryptocurrency lol,

Tom Cunningham
Date: 6/8/2022 3:28:00 AM

Wonder if he'll take PayPal lol

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/7/2022 11:51:00 PM

Thank you Tom, who knows what surreal out of body experience may take place in those final milliseconds of life, as for Charon I’ve got a tab going with him, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 6/7/2022 2:49:00 PM

David, I was enthralled while reading each line of this fantastic write. It's a glimpse into your thoughts on dying, and a very poignant one. I'm delighted to see you write something other than monoku, so I hope to encourage you to offer more of these insightful poems.

David Kavanagh
Date: 6/7/2022 3:14:00 PM

Thank you Jenna, indeed this one is an abstract approach to death, and my interpretation of the microseconds before one expires, even looking into a possible beyond scenario, Thank you for your encouraging words, I do probably need a little time out from monokus, cheers David