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Split Wide Open

As I gaze upon my shadow, 
it appears to grow a hole 
Just where my heart belongs, 
morphs a void into my soul 
Open to all the elements, 
sunlight shines right through 
split second after a cannonball 
ripped my chest in two 

Give back my innards 
Return this heart to me
Fill this visceral hole 
And leave my body be 

Still I look upon my shadow, 
now appears to sprout wings
emanating from my loins, 
fledge red abstract things 
Open to all the elements, 
thermal winds raise me high
One moment after shrapnel, 
blew my atoms into the sky 

Give back my sinews
Return pink mist to me
Feed off your own evil
Go away leave mine be

Now searching for my shadow, 
it’s gone can’t be seen 
I haven’t got any eyes, 
only contours in between 
No need for rare elements, 
when sublimating the earth 
oh come closer afterlife, 
from my quanta seed rebirth 

Give back my conscious 
Return those eyes to me
Let meaning have a purpose 
And leave my shadow be

This or That, Vol 12 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh 
Split wide open 
06/07/22

Copyright © David Kavanagh | Year Posted 2022

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Edward Ibeh Date: 7/2/2022 5:40:00 PM Quite a marvelous piece with amazing imagery, David:-) Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest! Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 7/3/2022 12:46:00 AM If I only had a heart Edward, or indeed a couple of atoms left after that run in with the cannonball, thank you for the placement, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith Date: 7/2/2022 11:21:00 AM Congratulations on your win. A "Creative" write/story. Have a blessed/weekend................ Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 7/2/2022 12:55:00 PM Heya Paula, thank you so much, it’s a abstract perspective on the contest theme of being split wide open, cheers David

Sotto Poet Date: 7/2/2022 7:57:00 AM David, back with congratulations on your excellent win. You penned such a stunning Poem. Have a lovely weekend. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 7/2/2022 8:33:00 AM Thank you Lasaad for the good tidings, I’m always delighted to make the cut, cheers David

Sotto Poet Date: 6/7/2022 4:49:00 PM David, your writing is so excellent that I was fascinated as I read every word. And y You did a brilliant job portraying the passage from this earth toward the next. This is a conceptual approach to death and your perspective of the dying moments of a person's body. I am ecstatic to realize that you have composed something that is incredibly clever, extensive, and poetic. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/8/2022 12:03:00 AM High praise Lasaad, thank you for such a comprehensive positive overview of my poem, of course it’s conceptually abstract, using the shadow to illustrate the bigger picture, came perhaps as an afterthought, cheers David

Tom Cunningham Date: 6/7/2022 4:26:00 PM You captured the exit from this life to the next well David. I'm sure all sorts of things come to mind at the end Don't forget a coin for Charon. Tom Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/8/2022 5:29:00 AM Of course and cryptocurrency lol, Tom Cunningham Date: 6/8/2022 3:28:00 AM Wonder if he'll take PayPal lol David Kavanagh Date: 6/7/2022 11:51:00 PM Thank you Tom, who knows what surreal out of body experience may take place in those final milliseconds of life, as for Charon I’ve got a tab going with him, cheers David

Jenna Logan Date: 6/7/2022 2:49:00 PM David, I was enthralled while reading each line of this fantastic write. It's a glimpse into your thoughts on dying, and a very poignant one. I'm delighted to see you write something other than monoku, so I hope to encourage you to offer more of these insightful poems. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 6/7/2022 3:14:00 PM Thank you Jenna, indeed this one is an abstract approach to death, and my interpretation of the microseconds before one expires, even looking into a possible beyond scenario, Thank you for your encouraging words, I do probably need a little time out from monokus, cheers David