Spider In Winter

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A spider winters in the leaves,
Tucked from the bitter cold
it weaves, a den
within a curled, dead leaf
concealed
and covered, underneath,
when life has withered,
black and
brown,
it's empty shell,
goes floating
down

This poem is interesting that the meter is in iambic pentameter but I chose to format it like a Free Verse.

A spider winters in the leaves,
Tucked from the bitter cold it weaves,
a den within a curled, dead leaf
concealed and covered, underneath.

When life has withered, black and brown,
it's empty shell, goes floating down.

How would you have formatted it, if it were your poem.

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Date: 10/1/2022 9:12:00 AM
Beautiful poem..... Suzanne. I mostly prefer free verse to all other poetic forms as it allows maximum flexibility.
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 10/1/2022 4:39:00 PM
Hi Valsa: It does for me too. I started out a rhyming poet and then found I liked the way free verse let me speak instead of the rhymes.
Date: 9/25/2022 4:25:00 AM
Hi Suzanne. I tend to write in rhyme and have been known to split two lines of rhyme (a a) up into four (a b c b) just for the flow of it. Although I love reading and writing in rhyme I have to say that I prefer your free verse version here. Both are excellent but the free verse just edges it for me. I think it adds a certain depth to the description and gives the poem another dimension. Great read. Cheers - Gary
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 9/29/2022 5:44:00 PM
Hi Gary: Thanks for your thoughtful comment. Sorry it has taken me a while to get back back. We were worried about our place in Florida being hit by the monster hurricane. All is well now….a miracle.
Date: 9/24/2022 6:49:00 PM
Good job, Suzanne. I prefer the free verse version. I think it flows better and says more.
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Date: 9/29/2022 5:47:00 PM
Thanks Mike. I do too.
Date: 9/23/2022 7:08:00 AM
Clever and beautiful Suzanne. To answer your question, I quite like the free verse style for this short poem. :) Linda
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 9/23/2022 3:50:00 PM
Hi Linda: How fun to have you visit. I am so glad you like the free verse version. That is how I wrote it and my favorite version too. SuZ
Date: 9/20/2022 6:36:00 PM
I really like this, Suzanne... As for your question, since I do not like spiders, I probably would have 'forswatted' it, instead of reformatting it. Keep smiling, gw
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 9/23/2022 3:51:00 PM
Ha ha Gershwin. I definitely like to watch them from a distance. Especially the deadly ones. SuZ
Date: 9/17/2022 8:23:00 AM
Great imagery. I could see (and even smell) the dying leaves of cold winter days and felt the soft floating of the spider's shell floating down.
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 9/17/2022 10:20:00 AM
So happy you enjoyed this Jeff: Thanks for letting me know. SuZ
Date: 9/17/2022 2:06:00 AM
A really fine piece penned so excellently Suzanne, with good imagery and insightful thought. Have a great weekend,Gordon
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 9/17/2022 3:26:00 AM
Nice to see you, Gordon and thanks for your thoughtful comment on this old favorite of mine. Suzanne
Date: 9/16/2022 11:38:00 PM
So perfectly pictured, I feel like I'm inside the leaf myself! Elizabeth
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 9/17/2022 3:23:00 AM
That’s a lovely comment, Elizabeth: I went through quite a phase where I was fascinated with spiders from a safe distance of course ha ha
Date: 9/16/2022 7:59:00 PM
I love this type of poetry. so poignant and not really long or difficult to read. A FAVE
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 9/17/2022 3:21:00 AM
Thanks Andrea: I am pulling up old memories from when we had our small farm in the Dooralong valley. Thanks so much for the Fav.
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