Sparrow

Sparrow

“You are just a sparrow Honey Chile “
“I’m not” she said to him
“You sort of sometimes drive me wild”
She said “it is no sin”
“So shut up Chook I’m gonna talk”
He clamps her beak so thin
She squeaks an something, squawks
And then  she does him in

Don Johnson

For Francines competition 2nd

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/26/2011 2:01:00 PM

Congratulations, Don... perfect .. nice lesson... take care p.d...

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/16/2011 11:41:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Francine's contest Don. Love,Carol

Gautami Phookan

Date: 5/14/2011 8:30:00 AM

Love this chirpy conversation ..and how he calls her 'chook', that's so sweet, and clamping her thin beak...wonderful interpretation..Congrats on your super win Don...Awesome!!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/11/2011 1:59:00 PM

Congratulations on your win..Sara

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/11/2011 7:43:00 AM

So cute!!! Congratulations!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/11/2011 5:37:00 AM

Congratulations on the second place win in the contest, Don

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 5/11/2011 5:21:00 AM

great poem and big win Don. wonderful. A hearty congrats to you!

Emma Buckeridge

Date: 5/10/2011 10:01:00 PM

A great 2nd place win, many congratulations x

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 5/10/2011 9:02:00 PM

She DID him in..great line. congrats on your big win. BG

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/10/2011 8:16:00 PM

Congrats DON on your super big win in Francine's contest for this dynamic entry luv.. so happy to be sharing this winners list with u luv.. enjoy your top spot for a top notch poem luv.

Samual Ronthorpe

Date: 5/10/2011 8:07:00 PM

Very good. Congrats

Don Johnson
Date: 5/10/2011 9:21:00 PM

Thank you Samual something new for me almost winning thanks mate Don

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/10/2011 7:55:00 PM

Congratulations on your big win, Don! Best wishes, Carolyn

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/10/2011 7:43:00 PM

Congrats on your win. Jivey language and fun rhyme. Gwendolen

Francine Roberts

Date: 5/10/2011 7:35:00 PM

congrats Don on your second place win in my contest, the last line had me laughing out loud

Don Johnson
Date: 5/10/2011 9:28:00 PM

Thank you Francine you made my day no other love does come this way 4 you i'd paddle in the river styx with me wrists n ankles strapped to bricks! thanks babe Don ps been babysittin an old rhymer last 2 days gettin his 82 year old Halliwell eye fixed for cataract...so not been online mucho