Ink Empress Poet Free verse

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3 am scribble for the Prompt " space between the stars is not empty" sponsored by Dilly Dally

space between stars

and in darkness  ~ 
when the music of 
          love is muted
her thoughts b u 
                     r s t 
into a 
     constellational 
               c o l
                    l i s s 
                  i o n 
 of confetti tears ~ 
emanating 
      esoteric embers 
    dusted with
c o l l 
     a p s e d reveries….
as the somatic space 
between the stars is 
                not empty~
never silent, 
      forever fluorescent
  reverberating 
     in euphonic resonance

there within the 
    sparks of 
 electric heartbeats
   where promises 
f l o a t 
   like hourglass pearls
  you’ll find an 
astronomical 
       abomination~
  unfinished 
metaphors handwritten 
in
moonstone melancholy
like forgotten elegies
     to the jasmine skyline~
       woven
 with radioactive ink

but will the 
atomic warmth 
    of the 
bluest flames
 from the hypnotic 
sea of nothingness
illuminate fervent 
   f l 
   a r e 
         s  of soulmates
     tangled in 
ephemeral effervescence
     tied to 
clandestine dreams
lost in the luminous 
    arms of 
   deceased 
            desires? 

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Crystol Woods November 8, 2024 at 10:02 AM Wow... so much going on in such few words...I could read this a hundred times and find new truths and new ideas to ponder! Awesome! Xo

Duke Beaufort October 31, 2024 at 2:39 PM IE, your description of this space adds to the mystery of it. The burst of her thoughts could be an allegory for what we call the Big Bang. Just saying. Hard to know what all this universe consists of or how it got here. You have me in that space and smiling!

Abdullah Alhemaidy October 30, 2024 at 1:58 PM Very enjoyed read of your so lovely poem!

Paula Goldsmith October 28, 2024 at 9:54 AM Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading this. I love on the top where you say, "3 am scribble for the Prompt."  First, it is Not a scribble but a wonderful write. Maybe 3 am is your writing time... Have a wonderful Autumn day with your win.................

Mystic Rose Rose October 27, 2024 at 9:48 PM ah, glad it won, loved it from the start Ink, congrats

Hiya Sharma October 27, 2024 at 9:33 PM I feel absolutely taken away into that ephemeral realm where stars twirl in a smoke and leave traces of magic in the nothingness... So many vulnerable emotions you've infused in your words here and I truly love how you've made them flow.. like fragmented feelings, yet interwoven seamlessly with majestic wordsmithery and alliteration. "and in darkness ~ when the music of love is muted" How breathtaking is this opening line.. my gosh!! "confetti tears" That line really felt celestial yet soulful. "unfinished metaphors handwritten in moonstone melancholy, like forgotten elegies to the jasmine skyline" Wowwww, stunning and heart-touching! Hiya Sharma October 27, 2024 at 9:37 PM And that ending really stole my heart, so evocatively you've questioned if the evanescent reverie of love will still be fulfilled beyond the emptiness.. This is once again one of my FAVEs from you and I can see it secured a winning place! Heartiest congratulations to you dear fairy goddess! Keep shining and writing always ~

Andrea Dietrich October 27, 2024 at 8:47 PM I knew this would be a winner. Big congrats. And what a surprise. I even made it onto the list! Made me so happy.

thriveni c mysore October 27, 2024 at 8:27 PM precious write dear poet. congratulations on your win. cheers

Victor Buhagiar October 27, 2024 at 9:09 AM Dotted with excellent alliteration, I admire how you describe the stars, planets and meteors that blaze in the depths of the night sky. Space is so vast we can never capture its beauty. Ink Empress October 27, 2024 at 7:04 PM So kind of you dear victor thank you so very much

Paige Hind October 26, 2024 at 10:04 PM Hmmm....I liked the part about the bluest flames. Light can light lights...every light lights something....beautiful work. <3 Ink Empress October 27, 2024 at 7:04 PM Thank you always sweet paige

Hilda Greenhough October 26, 2024 at 7:58 PM I like these words. I feel a forever love in it. With reference to the vastness of space, 'floating in search of' is how it makes me feel. An exhilaration. Good luck with the contest. Ink Empress October 27, 2024 at 7:03 PM Ive missed seeing you around dear hilda. Hope all is well with you: happy to see you today and thank you for your kind comment as always

Evelyn Judy Buehler October 26, 2024 at 7:06 PM Oh my, how gorgeous! Love the confetti tears, the hourglass pearls, the jasmine skyline and so much more! Stunning. It's a fave for me. Best of wishes. Ink Empress October 27, 2024 at 7:04 PM Thank you so much for the fave and comment talented soul! Appreciate your visits always

Mystic Rose Rose October 26, 2024 at 10:18 AM confetti tears , may you never never see any of those Ink, and may your heart smile wide as you receive your accolade for a beautiful poem well written. Luv xo Ink Empress October 27, 2024 at 7:05 PM Thank you so very much dear rose always grateful for your empathetic comments truly

Tom Cunningham October 26, 2024 at 9:43 AM You're an an early riser 03.00. Many a time I've woke at that ungodly hour and started writing too. This is more than a scribble lol, brilliant writing IE, great use of metaphors too. Good luck in the contest. Tom Ink Empress October 27, 2024 at 7:06 PM Ah i was awake at 3 as its friday and weekend and i am a bit of w nocturnal haha. I always get lines at 3 am. So kind of you dear Tom thank you so much

Silent One October 26, 2024 at 9:41 AM It is interesting how you always use cosmic descriptions as metaphors in your poems and it is quite understandable for this poem, as the theme is the distance between space and stars... I can see you have put a personal touch to it and this one gives me the feeling of a relationship which has ended, especially through terms like 'deceased desires' and 'forgotten elegies'... It seems that sometimes love is not enough in a relationship as sometimes distance can be a difficult situation..

Sara Kendrick October 26, 2024 at 4:45 AM This one reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. I wonder what is out there but not enough to want to go out there to find out. LOL... Sara K

Joseph P. DiMino October 26, 2024 at 3:52 AM "but will the atomic warmth of the bluest flames from the hypnotic sea of nothingness, illuminate fervent flares of soulmates," -- Indeed...without presence, there is nothing. Love will ignite...for there is nothing of significance without love. Love shapes and forms life around us. To reach into, to mold and draw from the void, is to inject individualized spirit of heartfelt passion into the limitless potential of divine mystery. For all real purpose, there is nothing till we know it. Feel and sing...as God projected His heartfelt waves of vibration into all tributaries of eternal sea.

Lioness Onpaper October 26, 2024 at 3:11 AM when the music of love is muted, her thoughts burst into a constellational collision, oooooo that liiiiine!!! confetti tears ..! I loooove!!! promises float like hourglass pearls ….ooooooo !!! you’ll find an astronomical abomination unfinished metaphors handwritten in moonstone melancholy, ooooo papi!!! The things this piece is doin to me … u r absolutely making my world stop with such gorgeousness!!! tangled in ephemeral effervescence tied to clandestine dreams, if I was standing rn i would have definitely fallen!!! Head freaking over heals!!! lost in the luminous arms of deceased desires… mmmm this piece was is a absolutely stunning papi!!!!! Ink Empress October 26, 2024 at 3:13 AM Hahahah you are too funny

Brian Davey October 26, 2024 at 2:42 AM I really love your choice of words throughout and the touch of alliteration used in the perfect spots. Your vocabularic skills are amazing, good luck in the contest definitely should place well from what I've read Ink Empress October 26, 2024 at 3:05 AM Thank you so much dear brian, i appreciate your kind feedback truly.

Karen Jones October 26, 2024 at 1:47 AM Love the word choices and alliteration flowing seamlessly dear Inky. This poem is like soul food which one should savor every metaphor and mind bite of poetry! “music of love is muted, her thoughts burst into a constellational collision, of confetti tears ~ emanating esoteric embers, dusted with collapsed reveries…” Love this! Ink Empress October 26, 2024 at 6:45 AM Thats such a sweet comment i appreciate that truly ! Touched my heart Karen Jones October 26, 2024 at 4:10 AM Anything you do is art! What you may think is too metaphorical is to your readers mere icing on cake. There’s never too much great poetry! Ink Empress October 26, 2024 at 2:56 AM Awwn beautiful soul! Yes sometimes i get too metaphorical. Thank you for being so supportive i appreciate always your visits and kindness

Andrea Dietrich October 26, 2024 at 1:05 AM Ahhh yes. You turned to romance as well. Excellent, Ink . Your scribbles are nothing like actual scribbles!! Ink Empress October 26, 2024 at 1:16 AM Ah the contest was filling up so i was like half asleep when I wrote this. And 20 lines is so hard to do: u know i write 100 lines usually (haha) this prompt is gorgeous. And there wer so many good ones including urs. Thank you sweet soul aunt

The Aura Rhymes October 26, 2024 at 12:41 AM Music of love is always muted in my life . Hehe love this poem Ink Empress October 26, 2024 at 12:43 AM Haha well you should maybe allpw the music of love to find you!